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The line chart indicates the change of average number of Carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person measure in metric tonnes in 4 countries: United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

Overall these 4 countries had different average number of Carbon Dioxide emissions per person and in sort from highest to lowest: United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy & Portugal. The Carbon Dioxide emission per person in Italy & Portugal increase steadily whereas United Kingdom & Sweden tended to decrease the Carbon dioxide emissions, especially it can be observed a dramatic change in Sweden.

A glance at the graph provided reveals some striking similarities between the Portugal and Italy CO2 emission amounts during the period from 1967 to 2007.

It is evident that both nations saw a considerable increase in CO2 emission, with lowest during the 1967s and highest during the 2007s.

Emitting about more than 1 tonnes in 1967, the CO2 emissions in Portugal increased average 1 tonnes in every ten-year periods and reached highest point at about more than 5 tonnes in 2007. Italy also had the same upward trend as Portugal with the CO2 emissions lowest at more than 4 tonnes in 1967 and highest at about 8 tonnes in 2007.

In the other hand, United Kingdom and Sweden had a downward trend throughout the period. Yet the variation were different between the countries. The CO2 emissions in United Kingdom decreased gradually from nearly 11 tonnes in 1967 to 9 tonnes in 2007. Sweden saw a substantial fluctuation over the years when the CO2 emissions increased from nearly 9 tonnes in 1967 to over 10 tonnes in 1977. After that, in just 10 years, it dropped sharply to about 7 tonnes in 1987 and from there, the following 20 years kept a marginal decrease to 5 tonnes in 2007.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The line chart (wrong word) indicates the change of average number (wrong word. The graph does not plot the average number of times each person emitted CO₂. ) of Carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person measure (wrong form) in metric tonnes in 4 (wrong form) countries: the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

"carbon dioxide" is a common noun. It is not capitalized. Not "Carbon Dioxide" not "Carbon dioxide." The acronym CO₂ is in capital letters.

I repeat the same advice as before: If a number is small, and is not a data value on the table, chart, or graph, write it in words. e.g. "The four countries...."

Overall (comma) these 4 countries had different average number of Carbon Dioxide emissions per person and in sort (wrong word) from highest to lowest: the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy & (wrong form) Portugal. The Carbon Dioxide emissions per person in Italy & Portugal increase steadily whereas in the United Kingdom & (wrong form)Sweden, they tended to decrease ~~the Carbon dioxide emissions~~, (comma splice error) especially ~~it can be observed~~ there was a dramatic change in Sweden.

~~A glance at the graph provided reveals~~ There are some striking similarities between the ~~Portugal and Italy~~ CO2 emission amounts during the period from 1967 to 2007. (You do not need to repeat the time period. You already wrote that in the first paragraph. What are the similarities? )

It is evident that Both nations ~~saw~~ had a considerable increase in CO2 emission, with lowest during the 1967s and highest during the 2007s.

(1920s = 1920, 1921, 1922, 1923, 1924, 1925, 1926, 1927, 1928 and 1929. The ending -s is for exactly 10 years, where the last digit runs from 0 to 9. There are not two or more years called 1967! There is only one.)

Emitting ~~about~~ a little more than 1 tonnes in 1967, the CO2 emissions in Portugal increased an average of 1 tonnes (ton. tonnes is plural.) in every ten-year periods (wrong form) and reached its highest point at ~~about~~ a little more than 5 tonnes in 2007. Italy also had the same upward trend as Portugal with the CO2 emissions lowest at more than (18 is more than 4, and so is 32) 4 tonnes in 1967 and highest at about 8 tonnes in 2007.

In the other hand, the United Kingdom and Sweden had a downward trend throughout the period. Yet the variation were different between the countries. The CO2 emissions in United Kingdom decreased gradually from nearly 11 tonnes in 1967 to 9 tonnes in 2007. Sweden ~~saw~~ had a substantial variability in its per capita emissions ~~fluctuation~~ over the years when the CO2 emissions increased from nearly 9 tonnes in 1967 to over 10 tonnes in 1977. After that, in just 10 years, it dropped ~~sharply~~ to about 7 tonnes in 1987 and from there, over the following 20 years it sustained a slow annual ~~kept a marginal~~ decrease to 5 tonnes in 2007.

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AlpheccaStars: you are very patient !

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