Ielts writing task 1 _ Help me

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The given line graph illustrates the number of stealing vehicles per thousand ones of four countries in Europe during the period from 1990 to 1999.

Overall, Great Britain has the highest figure for thefts and follows a downward trend ; wheares , this percentage in Canada varies slightly and accounts for the least positon.

Specifically, begining with 18 thefts in 1000 vehicles, Great Britain experienced some negligible fluctuations between 1990 and 1996.After that,there was a significant decline in the number of robberies. Similarly, France witnessed a modest decrease in the proportion of theft vehicles ( 8 for the former and 6 for the latter).

In contrast, in 1990,Sweden started at a lowest point with only 5 stealing cases. After six years, this volumn increased considerably ,then,it remained unchanged until 1998 and continued to rise. Besides, Canada taked the second position in the rate of thefts in the first shown period.During 9 years, it luctuated steadily with 6 cases in 1000 vehicles.

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Make sure you do not put a space before a punctuation mark. Put a space after a punctuation mark. I have highlighted some of the mistakes.

You must be very careful and precise in vocabulary use for Task 1. Task 1 is to describe a mathematical diagram very accurately. Synonyms do not work very well because they seldom have the same meaning. In science articles, there are figures. These are diagrams and illustrations. The word "figure" is vary rarely used in task 1 to mean a value or number.

The ~~given~~ line graph illustrates the number of stealing vehicles (wrong phrasing. Do vehicles steal money?
Examples: a crying baby = a baby who cries;
a sinking ship = a ship that is sinking;
a sleeping dog = a dog that is asleep) per thousand ones (wrong usage) of four countries in Europe during the period from 1990 to 1999.

Overall, Great Britain has the highest figure (wrong word) for thefts and follows a downward trend ; wheares , (spacing and spelling errors) this percentage (There are no percentages on the graph.) in Canada varies slightly and accounts for the least positon.

Specifically, begining with 18 thefts in 1000 vehicles, Great Britain experienced (avoid anthropomorphic verbs like experience and witness in Task 1. Use them in Task 2. ) some negligible fluctuations (wrong word) between 1990 and 1996.After that,there (spacing errors) was a significant decline in the number of robberies. (wrong word) Similarly, France witnessed a modest decrease in the proportion (There are no proportions on the graph.) of theft vehicles (wrong phrasing.) ( 8 for the former and 6 for the latter).

In contrast, in 1990,Sweden started at a lowest point with only 5 stealing cases. (Incorrect. There were more than 5 auto thefts in Sweden in 1990.) After six years, this volumn increased considerably ,then,it (spacing errors) remained unchanged until 1998 and continued to rise. Besides, Canada taked (incorrect form) the second position in the rate (There are no rates on the graph.) of thefts in the first shown period.During 9 years, it luctuated steadily with 6 cases in 1000 vehicles.

Fluctuation.

Theses graphs show you what "fluctuation" looks like. It is a very fast movement up and down around an average value. "Vary / Variation" is a slower, smaller change.

Ielts writing task 1 _ Help me

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