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The line graph indicates the variation of the 65-and-over age percentage of residents in three countries: Japan, Sweden and The United States between 1940 and 2040.

It is noticeable that there was an upward trend of the rate of people aged 65 and over in all the countries given for the majority of a hundred-year period. Additionally, an unexpectedly considerable rise can be seen in the propotion of this category of Japaneses in later half of this duration .

From 1940 to before 1980, the percentage of the senior civilians in USA rose quite moderately, from around 9 percent to 15 percent. The figure for those of Sweden experienced a similar trend over the same period, with the propotion almost doubling from 7 percent. However Japan was the country which owned the lowest rate of becoming older, with the modest percentage just below 5 percent.

Before 2020, the mature people in USA remained plateau at around 15 percent of overall population before rising to a peak of 24 percent in 2040. The propotion of 65-and-over residents in Sweden fluctuated between 14 and 20 percent and also reached the vertex in 2040, with the percentage of 25%. The percentage of 65-and-over people in Japanese slightly increased to 10 percent until around 2030 when underwent the sky-rocketing of this percentage from to 10 percent to 27 percent, the highest figure in 3 countries.