IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain

Topic:

The chart below shows the percentage of cinema attendance by age group in Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

My essays:

This line graph presents the proportions of audiences who attend the movie theater in Great Britain dividing into four groups. Overall, the fluctration happened incessantly throughout 16 years from 1984 to 200 and the rate of appearance in the cinema was the highest among the 15-24 age group.

In 1984, only 10% of people from 7 to 14 years old went to cinema, then it slightly rose to approximately 15% before going back 10& in 1989. At the same time, firgues at the age of 35 and over took acount forr only 1% and didnot have remarkable chang in the next 5 years. Of the age group 15-24, 16% attended cinemas while 4% one from 25 to 35 years old. Despite the minor fluctration, these two lines relatively increased steadily.

Between 1989 and 2000, although the rate remained the lowest among age groups, the percentage of the over 35s who divide their budget in the movie theater witnessed a steady growth to 14%. There was a deamatic volatility in the firgues from 15 to 24 years old in 1995, then stayed constant by 48% in the next 2 years before reaching the peak to 58% in 1999. As for adolecents between 7 to 14 attedning the cinema, the ling from nearly 10% grew up to 30% and reached the highest point at 39%. The audiences in the group age 25-35 started at 10%, rose to 25% in 1994 and varied considerably until 2000.