IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - CHART - AREAS OF CRIME

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This is my essay for IELTS Writing Task 1. I would be grateful if someone here could provide some comments.

The chart compares the changes of crime in car theft, burglary and robbery in New Port city centre between 2003 and 2013.

It is clear that the number of robberies was by far lowest during the research period. Additionally, the figure for burglary experienced the most dramatic change.

In 2003, the number of burglaries that took place in city was highest, at nearly 3500 incidents. At the same time, more than 500 robbery incidents occured, compared to approximately 3000 incidents of car theft. In 2008, robbery incidents dropped slightly and reached the lowest point of 500 incidents, whereas the other two figures gradually went up.

In 2012, the quantity of car theft incidents grew remarkably to more than 2500 and became the highest figure in the chart, while burglary's figure experienced a significant fall to approximately 1500 incidents. Meanwhile, the figure for robberies remained stable at just over 500 incidents.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

Read my advice for Task 1 essays. You make the common mistakes. IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

The chart (wrong word. This is not a bar chart or pie chart. You need to be accurate in the names of these figures.) compares the changes in three types of crime in ( car theft, burglary and robbery ) in New Port city centre between 2003 and 2013. (You need to report exactly what is in the figure.)

~~It is clear that~~ The number of robberies was by far the lowest of the three types of crime during the ~~research~~ (The instructions do not indicate it was a research study. Do not add extra information that is not there.) period. Additionally, the ~~figure~~ (wrong word.) data for burglaries had ~~experienced~~ (Wrong word. Only living creatures can have experiences. ) the most dramatic change, dropping / declining / decreasing by more than half. At the end of the period, total crime had dropped by a third, from about 6700 to 4400 incidents.

In 2003, the number of burglaries that took place in the city was highest, at nearly 3500 incidents. At the same time, more than 500 robbery incidents occured, compared to approximately 3000 (2700) incidents of car theft. In 2008, robbery incidents dropped slightly and reached the lowest point of 500 incidents, whereas the numbers for the other two ~~figures~~ gradually went up.

In 2012, the ~~quantity~~ number of car theft incidents grew remarkably to more than 2500 and became the highest ~~figure~~ in the chart, while burglaries fell ~~figure experienced a~~ significantly ~~fall~~ to approximately 1500 incidents. Meanwhile, ~~the figure for~~ robberies ended at about the same as in the beginning. ~~remained stable at just over 500 incidents~~.

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - CHART - AREAS OF CRIME

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