IELTS WRITING TASK 1 ACADEMIC

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The table provides data on changes in what taiwanese students of both sexes criterion on choosing overseas university depends on 8 certain elements between 1998 and 2008, measured in percentage.

Overall, ranking and cost of tuition still remained the same as the most important students of both sexes priorities while the opposite was true for modern teaching methods.

More specially, the figures of relying on ranking dropped slightly from 97% in 1998 to 95% in 2008 with male and from 100% in 1998 to 90% in 2008 with female, to make tuition fee being male and their couterparts biggest consideration with the figures of 97% and 95% compatibly in 2008.

In both sexes, location factor experienced the biggest climbed trend with similar rate at exactly 14%. On another hand, the biggest decrease belong to modern teaching facilities with a drop of 24%, from 66% in 1998 to 42% in 2008 while the opposite sex downward trend happened with good language support with a drop of 18% from 39% in 1998 to 21% in 2008.

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Most of your writing is ungrammatical. You should practice writing short but correct and comprehensible sentences.

The table provides data on changes in what taiwanese students of both sexes criterion on choosing overseas university depends on 8 certain elements between 1998 and 2008, measured in percentage.

(That sentence is completely mangled and ungrammatical. It is impossible to capture all the essential points of this exercise in one sentence, so don't even try. It is best to give several sentences to describe complicated illustrations, such as this one. I recommend a paragraph such as this one:

The tables list numbers, in percentages, from the responses of surveys of Taiwanese citizens who aspire to study in an overseas university. Each table has eight rows and two columns. The rows show the criteria for their selecting the school, such as the ranking of the school, the costs of tuition and housing, and the location. There are two tables, one for male repondants and another for females and there are two columns, one each for the two survey dates, 1998 and 2008. The data allow comparison of the importance of the various criteria for males versus females, and how their relative selection criteria changed from the start to the end of this ten-year period.

Overall, ranking and cost of tuition still remained the same as the most important students of both sexes priorities while the opposite was true for modern teaching methods.

More specially, the figures of relying on ranking dropped slightly from 97% in 1998 to 95% in 2008 with male and from 100% in 1998 to 90% in 2008 with female, to make tuition fee being male and their couterparts biggest consideration with the figures of 97% and 95% compatibly in 2008.

In both sexes, location factor experienced the biggest climbed trend with similar rate at exactly 14%. On another hand, the biggest decrease belong to modern teaching facilities with a drop of 24%, from 66% in 1998 to 42% in 2008 while the opposite sex downward trend happened with good language support with a drop of 18% from 39% in 1998 to 21% in 2008.

The word "trend" is not applicable for tables, bar charts or pie charts that only show two time points.

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