IELTS WRITING TASK 1
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The two bar charts compare how much time children spend with their mother and father on weekdays and weekends.
Overall, offsprings spend more time with their mom on weekdays, whereas parents receive the most time on weekends from all age groups.
On weekdays, children from 4 to 5 and 8 to 9 age groups spend more than two hours with their dad, while it takes around 6 hours of children aged 2 to 3 and 6 to 7 to be with their mother. Just only one hour is spent with both dad and mom by children from the 4 to 5 age group.
On weekends, there is more than one hour spent with dad by children 4 to 5 years old, compared with around 0.5 hour by the 8 to 9 group. The amount of time spent for parents of the 4 to 5 age group is the highest, standing at more than ten hours, while the figure for children under two years old totals around nine hours.
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The two bar charts compare how much time children spend with their mother and father (That does not describe the chart accurately. ) on weekdays and weekends. (You did not mention the age groups.
- The two bar charts compare how much time children spend with their mother and father (That does not describe the chart accurately.
- ) on weekdays and weekends.
- (You did not mention the age groups.
- ) Overall, offsprings (wrong word Remove this word from your vocabulary.
- It is mostly used for animals and biology contexts.
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The two bar charts compare how much time children spend with their mother and father (That does not describe the chart accurately. "Mother and father" means both parents together.) on weekdays and weekends. (You did not mention the age groups. Not good.)
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