IELTS WRITING TASK 1
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The two maps illustrate how a beachfront area in Australia has changed since 1950.
Overall, there have been a number of changes, and the most significant of which are the expansion of the main road, the construction of surf clubs, while some parts of the area remain unchanged.
In 1950, to the left side of the map, there was a road leading to a car park beside a pavilion. A dining table was located in the center, and next to it was a playground. In the southern part of the area, there were two pools across the beach, and a lighthouse.
Now, the road has been lengthened, reaching to the lighthouse. The playground is removed to make way for a new car park. Moreover, a restaurant has been built to the south of the map, with the construction of two surf clubs on both sides next to it and the lighthouse. No changes are made to the pools and the beach, and the dining table and the pavilion stay in the same location.
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The two maps illustrate how a beachfront area in Australia has changed since 1950. Overall, there have been a number of changes, and the most significant of which are the expansion (wrong word) of the mai n road, the construction of surf clubs , (ungrammatical) while some parts of the area remain unchanged. Note: The extension of the access road appears significant, because it is in a very noticeable color - black - but actually it is not very important at all.
- The two maps illustrate how a beachfront area in Australia has changed since 1950.
- Overall, there have been a number of changes, and the most significant of which are the expansion (wrong word) of the mai n road, the construction of surf clubs , (ungrammatical) while some parts of the area remain unchanged.
- Note: The extension of the access road appears significant, because it is in a very noticeable color - black - but actually it is not very important at all.
- I would not pick this as a main feature.
- In 1950, to the left side (wrong phrase) of the map, there was a road leading to a car park beside a pavilion.
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The two maps illustrate how a beachfront area in Australia has changed since 1950.
Overall, there have been a number of changes, and the most significant of which are the expansion (wrong word) of the main road, the construction of surf clubs, (ungrammatical) while some
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