IELTS WRITING TASK 1

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The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

The line charts compare figures for expenditure on sports and attendance of children in three different sports in Britain from 2008 to 2014.

Overall, the amount of money spent on sport and participation of children all followed an upward trend over the period. Moreover, football registered the highest data compared to two other sports.

A closer look at the first line chart reveals that the statistic started from 20 pounds in 2008 and proliferated to over 30 pounds in the end of the timescale. Turning to the second graph, football recorded a noticeable figure, 8 million participants, which increased by 1 million in 2014.

In terms of Athletics and Swimming, both stayed at one and two million at the starting point. After the intersection in 2011, Athletics surged to 5 million, 2 million higher than the figure for Swimming (3 million) in the following year. Finally, both ended the time frame with 4 million for Swimming and around 5 million for Athletics.

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Teechr · Accepted Answer

The line charts compare ~~figures for~~ expenditure on sports and ~~attendance~~ participation of children in three different sports in Britain from 2008 to 2014.

Overall, the amount of money spent on sport and participation of children ~~all~~ both followed an upward trend over ~~the~~ that period. Moreover, football ~~registered~~ had the highest ~~data~~ rate of participation compared to swimming or athletics. ~~two other sports~~.

[ 1] ~~A closer look at the first line chart reveals that the statistic~~ Spending started ~~from~~ at £20 ~~pounds~~ in 2008 and [ 2] ~~proliferated~~ rose in a linear manner to over £30 ~~pounds in~~ [ 3] by the end of the given period. ~~timescale~~.

[ 4] Turning to the second graph, football was by far the most popular sport, ~~recorded a noticeable figure,~~ starting at around 8 million participants, which increased ~~by 1~~ to almost 9 million in [ 3] by 2014.

[ 5] In terms of Athletics and Swimming, both stayed at one and two million at the starting point. After the intersection in 2011, Athletics surged to 5 million, 2 million higher than the figure for Swimming (3 million) in the following year. Finally, both ended the time frame with 4 million for Swimming and around 5 million for Athletics.

Similarly, swimming had approximately 2 million participants at the beginning, and its graph was also linear, rising to about 7.5 million by 2014.

Finally, athletics had an interesting trend. It started at about 1 million participants, but the graph remained at that level until 2010. It then rose significantly to reach a peak of 5 million participants by 2012, before dipping slightly over the final two years to end at just below 5 million in 2014.

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[ 1]: This is a summary task. Avoid meaningless fillers.

[ 2]: Wring word. Do not unnecessarily complicate your vocabulary.

[ 3]: “by x” means the changed happened over a period of time before and right up to X. “in X” means the change happened exactly in that year.

[ 4]: You need a separate paragraph for that.

[ 5]: Those have different and unrelated patterns. You should not lump them together.

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