IELTS Writing Task 1

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Can you check the writing task 1 for me, please? Thank you very much. One more thing, I have write a writing on the website https://ieltsonlinetests.com/wot/result/writing-practice-test-1-133492, but the examiner do not check therefore I post my writing again on this website? Sorry for this inconvenience.

Here is my writing.

The table details the quantity at three different points in time of five different standard fast food menu items consumed in Melbourne: 2005 at present and the 2025 estimate.

Overall, it is clear that hamburgers followed by fried chicken are the most popular fast food. Fried rice and noodles are the least-consumed fast food items. On the other hand, salads will be eaten in significant quantities in the future.

The figures for Hamburgers in 2005 were by far the largest, increasing 40 units, compared to the current figures, which are marginally lower at 38 units. We can make a contrast between fried chicken with 37 units being the most common alternative eaten by all people in Melbourne, although they only consumed 35 units per week more than 14 years ago.

Furthermore, the consumption of fried rice and noodles was equal to 6 units per person. At present, although there is a slight decrease in hamburger consumption of 2 units, it is still in the high popularity spot. However, with 8 units per customer, noodles are the food with the lowest intake. After this, salad consumption has seen an abundant rise over the years and in 2025 it is estimated to continue by three times. There are still no such notable changes compared to the year, a period when taking the cases of fried rice and noodles.

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Thanh H?i Nguy?n 5731One more thing, I have write a writing on the website https://ieltsonlinetests.com/wot/result/writing-practice-test-1-133492, but the examiner do not check therefore I post my writing again on this website?

I looked at a few of the practice tests on this website. There are grammatical errors in the instructions of a high proportion of my small, but random sample. I advise that you use this source with caution.

This particular task has several problems. First, the measurement is not clear. It is average grams per week or daily consumption? It is calorie values? Second, the time is not clear. What do they mean by "present"? Is it last year, 2019? If you are writing this essay in 2026, what is the meaning of "present?" Authentic Task 1 essays are designed to be free of these sorts of errors.

Because of this serious flaw in the topic, it is difficult to write a cogent essay, even for a native English speaker.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays.

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The table details(not a good word choice.) the quantity (Quantity of what?) at three different points in time of five different standard fast food menu items consumed in Melbourne: 2005 at present(ungrammatical) and the 2025 estimate.

Overall, ~~it is clear that~~ (unnecessary verbiage) hamburgers followed by fried chicken are the most popular fast food. Fried rice and noodles are the least-consumed fast food items. On the other hand, salads will be eaten much more ~~in significant quantities~~ in the future.

The ~~figures~~ (wrong word) units for Hamburgers in 2005 were by far the largest, increasing (unnatural) 40 units, compared to the current ~~figures~~, values, which are marginally lower at 38 units. We can make a contrast between fried chicken with 37 units being the second most common alternative (wrong word. These items are independent. ) eaten by ~~all~~ people in Melbourne, although they only consumed 35 units per week more than 14 years ago.(You are assuming 2019 ... That is the problem with this task.)

~~Furthermore,~~ the consumption of fried rice and noodles was equal to 6 units per person. (This was not in the instructions) At present, although there is (wrong tense) a slight decrease in hamburger consumption of 2 units, it is still in the high popularity spot. However, with 8 units per customer, noodles are the food with the lowest intake. After this, salad consumption has seen an abundant rise (wrong expression) over the years and in 2025 it is estimated to continue by three times. (unnatural) There are still no such notable changes compared to the year, a period when taking the cases of fried rice and noodles.

(That makes no sense. Your writing is very confusing. You need to write very precisely and clearly.)

Here is an example essay.

I had to modify the instructions so that a proper essay on this topic could be written.

Original: ~~The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne~~.

Corrected version:

The table below shows the average per capita weekly amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne.  The values were taken from a 2016 dataset which includes a ten-year projection.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The table lists the amounts of five different typical fast food menu items eaten per week per person in Melbourne at three different points in time: 2005, 2015 and a forecast for 2025. The items are hamburgers, fried chicken, salads, fried rice and noodles.

Overall, the rank order of these items is similar for the different time values, with hamburger always being first and fried chicken second. People in this city eat larger quantities of these foods in 2015 than in 2005, and this trend is expected to continue to 2025. Salads are forecast to gain much more than the other four.

In detail, in 2005, people ate more than six times as much hamburger as salad, fried rice or noodles. Chicken was in second place, about 5 grams less per day as hamburger at 40 grams. Amounts for every type of food except for hamburger increased from 2005 to 2015. Notably, salad went up by a factor of three, from 5 to 15 grams. It surpassed both fried rice and noodles, which rose from 6 to 9 grams and 6 to 8 grams, respectively. Considering the future projections, fried rice and noodles are expected to remain at about the same level, in contrast to salad, which will have another threefold jump. Hamburger and chicken show modest increases to 51 and 45 grams respectively.

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