Ielts writing task 1

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The graph illustrates the number of visitors who went to Caribbean island in the years between 2010 and 2017.

Starkly, while the amount of people staying on the island remain nearly steady in those years, the amount of those went by cruise ships and number in total rocketed through time significantly.

In 2010, there were 750.000 and 250.000 visitors came to the island by cruise ships or decided to stay on the island respectively. In between 2010 and 2012, the features of people staying on ships had met a dramatically decrease to its initial number after a slightly rise in 2011. Nonetheless, it was quite opposite when looking at number of whom staying on the island as it remained static in the first year and then followed by a remarkable increase from 2011 to 2013. Despite increasing, the number of people resided on the island tended to level off in the next three years and then met a trough between 2015 and 2017. On the other hand, the statistic of those staying on a yacht substantially rocketed all the way through 5 years, ended up at its peak at 2 million in 2017.

In conclusion, in spite of the fluctuation of those two number, the total figure had always been remaining gradually rise through all years.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The (what kind of graph?) graph illustrates (wrong verb) the number of visitors who went to this / a / one Caribbean island in the years between 2010 and 2017. (Incomplete. You did not tell the reader that there are four curves on this graph. That is a very key point.)

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Your vocabulary for task 1 needs improvement.
Also, you do not write relative clauses correctly.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. It will tell you about some of the vocabulary words you have used incorrectly.

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Starkly, (That word makes no sense.) while the amount (Amount is for non-count nouns, e.g. amount of water, amount of electricity, amount of sugar. It is incorrectly used.) of people staying on the island remain nearly steady in those years, the amount of those went by cruise ships (Ungrammatical clause structure.) and number in total rocketed (wrong word. Read my advice) through time significantly.

In 2010, there were 750.000 and 250.000 visitors came to the island (Ungrammatical clause structure.) by cruise ships (You never mentioned cruise ships in your first paragraph.) or decided to stay on the island respectively. In between 2010 and 2012, the features (wrong word. A feature of a person is a long nose or large eyes.) of people staying on ships had met a dramatically decrease (wrong expression. We can meet other people, but I have never met a decrease.) .to its initial number after a slightly (wrong form) rise in 2011. Nonetheless, it was quite opposite (wrong expression.) when looking at number of whom staying on the island as it remained static (wrong word.) in the first year and then followed by a remarkable (opinion word) increase from 2011 to 2013. Despite increasing, the number of people resided on the island (Ungrammatical clause structure.) tended to level off in the next three years and then met a trough (wrong expression.) between 2015 and 2017. On the other hand, the statistic (wrong word.) of those staying on a yacht substantially rocketed (wrong verb) all the way through 5 years, ended up at its peak (wrong word. Read my advice) at 2 million in 2017.

In conclusion, (Do not write a conclusion paragraph in Task 1. It is required for Task 2. Read my advice. ) in spite of the fluctuation (wrong word. Read my advice) of those two number, (wrong form) the total figure (wrong word. Read my advice) had always been remaining gradually rise (Ungrammatical clause structure.) through all years.

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