IELTS Writing Task 1

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The bar graph indicates the number of hours teachers spend in three different type of categories: Primary, Lower Secondary and Upper Secondary in four countries namely Japan, Spain, Iceland, and the USA in the year 2001.

Overall, it is clear that teachers in the US spent far more hours teaching than teachers in other countries whereas Japanese teachers spent the least time doing so.

Primary school teachers have spent nearly the same amount of time teaching in Japan, Spain and Iceland, respectively, around 600, 650, and 590. While for primary students in the USA invested more than 700 hours. Similarly, the average public school term of American teachers for lower secondary students in 2001 was 1000 hours, which was 300 to 400 hours higher than that of a teacher in the other three countries.

With the regardless to Spain and Iceland teachers use their time of 900 hours in 2001 to teach in the upper secondary group. Whereas Japan and the USA use their 7000 and approximately 1200 hours respectively for their number of hours. In comparison, Japan accounts for comparatively lower teaching hours in three divisions compared with other countries in 2001.

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The bar graph indicates the number of hours teachers spend in three different type (wrong form) of categories: (Categories is not correct here. Type is not correct either. What is depicted is the level of education.) Primary, Lower Secondary and Upper Secondary in four countries namely Japan, Spain, Iceland, and the USA in the year 2001.

The bar graph compares the total number of hours that teachers in four different countries spent in the classroom in 2001 in each of three different grade levels (primary, lower secondary, and upper secondary). The countries are the USA, Iceland, Japan and Spain.

Overall, ~~it is clear that~~ teachers in the US spent far more hours teaching than teachers in the other countries whereas Japanese teachers spent the least time doing so. Furthermore, the higher the education level, the more hours were devoted to teaching. This held for all countries.

Primary school teachers ~~have~~ spent nearly the same amount of time teaching in Japan, Spain and Iceland, respectively, around 600, 650, and 590. But it was more than 700 in the USA. (This avoid repetition.) ~~While for primary students in the USA invested (not a good word) more than 700 hours.~~ Similarly, the average ~~public~~ school term (Wrong word.) of American teachers for lower secondary students ~~in 2001~~ (You already gave the time in the first paragraph. There is no need to repeat it.) was 1000 hours, which was 300 to 400 hours higher than that of a teacher in the other three countries.

With the regardless (wrong phrase) to Spain and Iceland teachers use their time of 900 hours in 2001 to teach in the upper secondary school. ~~group~~. Whereas Japan and the USA use their 7000 and approximately 1200 hours respectively for their number of hours. In comparison, Japan accounts for comparatively lower teaching hours in three divisions compared with other countries ~~in 2001.~~

Here are some example sentences:

Besides being the country with the lowest numbers, Japan had the lowest difference in teaching hours between the different grade levels, 600 for the elementary school students and 700 for the high school students.

The ranking of these countries in terms of teaching hours is the USA, followed by Spain, Japan and Iceland. This is true for all three levels. Iceland showed a large increase when going from lower to upper secondary education (600 to 900 hours). The other countries increased the teaching load less dramatically in secondary school. (50, 150, and 190 hours for Japan, Spain, and the USA, respectively).

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