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The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.The line graph indicates the population of Japan by different age groups from 1960 to 2040.Overall, Japan's population by the 15-64 age group is the highest during the period shown. The population of the group over 65 gradually increase, while the proportion of those who are 0-14 years old is significant decrease.In 1960, the percentage of people who are 15-64 years old was about 65%. 30% was the figure for the 0-14 age group, whereas, over 65 age people accounted for just 5%. By the year 2000, people of the group 15-65 years old still at the top for 69%. In the same time saw the group over 65 age overtook the 0-14 age group as become the second-highest population group in Japan.By 2040, the proportion of people of the group 15-64 years old is predicted to slightly decline at around 55%. Over 65 age group's population is expected to reach a peak of around 35%, while, there is a constant fall in the percentage of the 0-14 age group at about 10%.

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The line graph ~~indicates~~ plots the population of Japan by different (How many?) age groups from 1960 to 2040. (Incomplete. What are the age groups?)

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The line graph gives the population of Japan divided into three age groups, beginning in 1960 to the present, with a projection to 2040. The age groups are the youth, (age 0 to 14), adults (age 15 to 64), and seniors (over 65).

Note that I name these groups so to avoid repetition and complex expressions in the body paragraphs.

Instead of "the over 65 group" or "the people over 65" you can just say "the seniors" or "the oldest age group."

Overall, Japan's population by in the 15-64 age group is the highest ~~during the period shown~~. The proportion of the population of the group over 65 gradually increase, while the proportion of those who are 0-14 years old is significant decrease. (wrong verb form)

In 1960, the percentage of people who are 15-64 years old was about 65%. It was 30% ~~was the figure~~ for the 0-14 age group, whereas, ~~over 65 age~~ people over 65 accounted for just 5%. By the year 2000, people in of the group 15-65 years old still ~~at the top for~~ predominate at 69%. ~~In the same time saw~~ A few years after 2000, the ~~group~~ over 65 age group overtook the 0-14 age group to as become the second-highest population group in Japan.

By 2040, the proportion of people in of the group 15-64 years old is predicted to ~~slightly~~ decline to at around 55%. That of the over 65 age group~~'s population~~ is expected to reach a peak (Incorrect. There is no peak for this age group on the graph. How do you know that the proportion will decrease after 2040? ) of around 35%, while, there is a constant fall in the percentage of the 0-14 age group to at about 10%.

There are only two peaks on the graph.

The proportion of the youth peaked at about 35% in 1970.
The proportion of adults had a very broad peak between 1970 and 1995 at around seven in ten.

There is no peak for the senior group.

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