IELTS Writing Task 1

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Topic: The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The two maps illustrate how Grange park has been changed from its opening in 1920 to the present.

Overall, it is obvious that the park has been rearranged significantly and more amenities have been built in the Grange park such as a cafe, an Amphitheatre for concerts, water features, and children's play area over the given period.

In 1920, tourists may visit a park on Arnold Avenue from the north or the southern one on Eldon street, but the park now has a new underground parking entrance. There was a fountain at the center of the park which is has been replaced with a huge rose garden surrounded by many seats.

The stage for musicians on the left-hand side of the fountain was demolished and replaced by an Amphitheatre for concerts. Similarly, there was another rose garden and a pond for water plants to the east of the Northern entry, but now, it was converted into a cafe and a children's play area. In addition, the glasshouse on the bottom right-hand corner has gone and now there is a water feature.