IELTS Writing Task 1

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The table and chart illustrate the percentage of commuters using different means of transport for their average age and the amount of carbon dioxide produced by each type of travelers.

The most popular form of transport is the private car accounting for 48 percent, whereas the figure for people who share their cars with other is 11%. On the other hand, 37 percent of commuters use train or buses, while 4 percent of the people use to walk and cycle to their work. According to the first chart, the average age of them is 47. Last on the list is cycling or walking, taking up only 4%. They are also the youngest of all these four types of travelers.

According to the second chart, there are some kinds of transportation which release CO2 emissions into the air. The unit of the parameter is a kilogram of released CO2 per person per kilometer. The most CO2 emissions are from the car which drives by only one person, sightly 0.3 kilos per person kilometer. People who share transport produce 0.8 kilos while using public transport produce only a tiny amount.

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The English of your essay is not very good. Write shorter correct sentences. It is more important correctly describe the figures than to try to be sophisticated. It is better not to use synonyms in Task 1. The task is to be precise, and synonyms seldom have exactly the same meaning.

The table and (what kind of chart?) chart illustrate the percentage of commuters using

The table and (what kind of chart?) chart illustrate the percentage of commuters using different means of transport for their average age (wrong phrasing) and the amount of carbon dioxide produced by each type of travelers. (wrong phrasing)

The most popular form of transport is the private car accounting for 48 percent, whereas the figure for people who share their cars (This is still a private car) with other is 11%. On the other hand, 37 percent of commuters use train or buses, while 4 percent of the people use to walk and cycle to their work. According to the first chart, (Is there a second chart?) the average age of them (Who?) is 47. Last on the list is cycling or walking, taking up only 4%. They are also the youngest of all these four types of travelers.

According to the second chart, (There is only one chart.) there are some kinds of transportation which release CO2 emissions (wrong phrasing) into the air. The unit of the parameter (wrong phrasing) is a kilogram of released CO2 per person per kilometer. The most CO2 emissions are from the car which drives by (Drive by means to pass a place. e.g. We drive by three cinemas on the way to school.) only one person, sightly 0.3 kilos per person kilometer. People who share transport produce 0.8 kilos while using public transport produce only a tiny amount.

Model essay:

Paragraph 1 describes the two figures, but not the data. Paragraph 2 describes the data in the table. Paragraph 3 describes the data in the chart. Avoid using the word "figure" in Task 1 to refer to data values. In academic articles, figures are graphs, charts, tables, and maps.

The two figures, a bar chart and a table, give information about commuters in Houston, Texas. The table lists the four types of transport used by commuters, the percent who use it and their average age. The types of transport are: a car and driver, carpooling, cycling or walking, and public transportation. The bar chart shows the CO2 emissions (kilograms per person per kilometer) for each of those four types of transport.

The average age of the commuters is between 39 and 47. Eighty-five percent of commuters travel by either driving their own car (48%) or by public transportation (37%). Only 11% carpool and the remainder (4%) either bike or walk to work. The average age of those commuting by private car (driving / carpooling) is 43 and 44. The bikers or walkers are younger (39) and the public transport users are older (47).

The CO2 emissions are highest for one person driving a car, 0.32 kg/person/km. If there are four people in a carpool, this value goes down by a factor of four. Public transportation has very low levels of emissions, (0.01). Walking or cycling generates no CO2 emissions.

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