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Monokuma a Posted 9 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

IELTS_ Writing task 1

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The line graph illustrates the rates of birth and death in the European country and how these rates change between 1950 to 2050.
Overall, there is a reduction in the proportion of the birth population, while the death rate of the European remains stable almost the time survey.
In 1950, the birth rate of the European was under 800000 people. The next 20 years, the rate was reached it's the highest point at 1 million people. By contrast, the rate saw a sharp fall in the number of the birth population in 1990, just 600000 people. In 2010, the birth rate was rose slightly and it is expected to stay the same at about 700000 people throughout the remainder of the period.
Compared with the birth rate, the rate of the death population was much more stable. During the period from 1950 to 2030, the death rate remains at around 700000 people. However, it seems to be a continuous rise in the number of the death population in the near future, reaching 800000 people.


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Where is the graph?

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It is difficult to write a good essay on this graph because it is not a proper graph. It does not show rates at all. It shows (I am guessing) the absolute numbers of births and deaths that occurred in the country.

However, I will highlight the grammatical problems in your writing.



The line graph illustrates the rates of births and deaths in the European country

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