IELTS Writing Task 1

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The provided bar graph shows data on the percentage of male and female teachers in 6 different stages in the UK education system in 2010. As can be seen in the graph, school level observes a huge gender gap in numbers of male and female teachers; however, higher education institutes are more equal in teacher presence.

In pre-school, primary school and secondary school, female teachers were dominant. They made up a particularly large portion of more than 90% in nursery and primary school, while male teachers comprised only 4% and 8% respectively. The figure for secondary school slightly drop to 54%, compared to 46% of male teachers.

Male and female were more equally represented in higher education level. In college, there were as many male teachers as female ones. Around 54% of teachers in private training institute were male, which exceeded 45% of female teachers. Males even outnumbered their female counterpart in university, where they took up 70% in teacher presence.