IELTS writing task 1

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates how many England tourists came to four different Brighton landscape in percentage between 1980 and 2010.

Overall, for most of the time in the period shown, pavilions had the highest proportion of visitors. The tourists who visited festivals in Brighton remained steady over the period.

In 1980, art galleries and pavilions had quite similar figures, at about 22% and 25% respectively. Art galleries experienced a sharply growth in percentage of visitors where it reached its peak at over 35% in 1985. However, this proportion dropped dramatically to under 10% in 2010. Similarly, pavilion's visitors rose to the highest point at about 48%, following by a significant decrease to 30% in 2010.

In the period from 1980 to 2010, percentage of pier's visitors in Brighton rose from 10% to over 20%, despite fluctuation. In contrast, there was a slow decline in the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton festivals, from 30% in 1980 to about 26% in 2010.