[Ielts Writing taks 1]. Please help me correct and get band score?. Many thanks

The linegraph illustrates the body weight of two men namely Jonh and Bob, While the table compare their’s exercise time, nutrition, and television viewing time between 2008 and 2013.

It’s is clear that there was an increased in the number of Jonh’s weight and a decreased in the number of Bob’s weight due to diet and exercise opposed over the period show.

Regarding the linegraph, In 2008, The weight of Jonh was 190 pounds, the figure of Bob was higher, at 250 pounds. In the following years, The John’s weight increased gradually from 190 pounds to 200 pounds from 2008 to 2011. In contrast, The Bob’s weight declined steadily from 250 pounds to 200 pound at the same time. In 2013, the figure for Jonh’s weight climbed to 240 pounds, while the figure for Bob’s weight fell down to 180 pounds.

According to the table, their’s excircise hour rose constanly from 0 (hrs/wk) to 20 (hrs/wk) between 2008 and 2012 and have a minimal declined in 2013. The nutrition of Job decreased from 15.000(kj/day) to 9.000(kj/day), while the nutrition of John increases from 10.000(kj/day) to 15.000(kj/day) over the period showns. The quantily of time they spend for television was equal, and fluctuations between 0 (hrs/wk) and 30 (hrs/wk) from 2008 to 2013.