IELTS WRITING PUBLIC TRANSPORT

I need your comments about this because I want to improve my writing skill.

Many people use their own cars rather than public transport, so it is up to the government to encourage people to use buses and trains instead. Do you agree or disagree to this statement?

Agree because:

• car accidents cause huge number of casualties
• cause traffic jam because more and more people drive to work
• car exhaust contributes to environmental pollution

Advantages of using buses and trains

• decrease in exhaust volume
• alleviate traffic jam because of less traffic
• easy to use

Here is my answer:

In the modern world, more and more people drive to work instead of using buses and trains. However, some people argue that the government should promote use of public transport. Personally, I completely concur with encouragement of using such services on some following grounds.

On the one hand, some people argue that using cars can cause some road and environmental problems. First, car accidents cause a huge number of casualties. If people drive carelessly, they will easily get car crashes. It is universially acknowledged that car accidents mainly caused high toll road. Second, cars can cause traffic jam because of increase in quantity of cars used. This can properly make people time-consuming to travel in rush hours. For example, if you drive in traffic congestion, it will take you ten to thirty minutes longer than in free road. Third, car exhaust contributes to acid rain and greenhouse effect. While the Earth becomes hotter, cars emit exhausted fumes which is very dangerous to inhale.

However, the advantages of public transit services cannot be denied. To begin with, a decrease in exhaust volume will be inevitable because of less traffic. In other words, the fewer people use personal vehicles, the less exhausted fumes emitted. Hence, environmental problems will be tackled by this mean. Moreover, this may necessarily alleviate traffic jam, which can directly shorten driving time. In addition, public transportation is very easy and cheap to use because of its availability. To be clearer, you just pay a little amount of money to use such services because of governmental support.

To conclude, I think the government should persuade people to use public transit services because of aforementioned merits. Also, the government should improve the quality of buses and trains to attract more people.