Ielts writing essays
This is my ielts writing task 1.Can someone help me check it and give me some advices ,please,thank you very much.
this is link of the charts (you can copy and search it on the Internet):
And this is my essays:
The pie chart and the table illustrate major reasons triggering land erosion and their influences on three areas of the world (NA,E,O) in the 1990s.
Overall,it is clear that over-grazing is the principal reason causing soil degradation .Also, land in Oceania took high proportion in over-grazing ,nevertheless, the figure for Europe reached the biggest in total land degraded. Looking at pie chart in more details,we can see that the proportion of over-grazing is the highest in the number of causes,at 35% .In terms of deforestation and over-cultivation ,the number of them is quite similar with 30% and 28%,respectively.There are other factors that have responsible for 7% of land degradation.
Looking more specific in three regions affected ,obviously 0.2% of deforestation impacts on NA was the lowest while 9.8% of this problem belonged to E ,in contrast and there was about 1.7% in the O figure.When it comes to over-cultivation, the figure for NA and E were both higher than acceptance(3.3% and 7.7% ) while O was not attacked by this factor .However, there was a problem in the percentage of land in O degarded by over-grazing ,which accounted for 11.3%,twice as much as the percentage of E.Finally,the proportion total land degraded by 3 problems were also the highest in E(23%).
P/S ; By the way do you think how many scores i can get in IELTS exam with this essay? I will be very glad to your comments.
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0You have a lot of spacing errors. Put a space after each punctuation mark. Do not put a space before a punctuation mark.
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