Ielts writing essay task 1

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The pie charts illustrate the average percentages in typical meals of three categories of nutrients, all of which may be harmful if consumed too much.

Overall, American residents consumed the maximum proportion of the usage of sodium and saturated fat from dinner meals, while they achieved the highest amount of added sugar by catching snacks. Meanwhile, there were approximately equal dosages of three nutrients in breakfast and lunch dishes.

In detail, there was a contrast usage pattern of three nutrients in dinner meal and snake meal. Sodium accounted for the lowest amount of consumption from snacks by 14 percent, contradicting the amount of that in dinner course which was consisted of 43 percent. Saturated fat was consumed much more at dinner time by 37 percent, as compared with perceiving through the snakes by 21 percent. Nevertheless, added sugar gained from snakes by 42 percent which was higher than that by 27 percent received from dinner dishes.