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EXPLAIN SOME OF THE WAYS IN WHICH HUMANS ARE DAMAGING THE ENVIRONMENT. WHAT CAN GOVERNMENTS DO TO ADDRESS THESE PROBLEMS? WHAT CAN INDIVIDUAL PEOPLE DO?

Nowadays, humans take responsibility for plenty of environmental problems. Thus the government in general and individual people, in particular, must take immediate actions to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet.

On the one hand, there are numerous issues facing humans today. First of all, the biggest threat to the environment is air pollution. Gas emissions come from industrial zones and exhaust fumes from motor vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating impact on the earth. Moreover, the cutting down of forests for wood, paper, and farming also contributes to the temperature rise. Those are the current alarming rate for human’s lives.

On the other hand, the government should make more efforts to find worthy solutions to reduce the effect on the planet. They could raise the awareness of people in the community to use public transport in lieu of private vehicles. Word has it that, the local authorities should implement laws to limit emissions from factories or to force factories to use renewable energy from solar, wind, and water power.

Last but not least, individuals are also responsible for the impact they have on the environment. We should cut down on the energy use: use led night bulbs and unplug unused electronic devices. Besides, we are able to choose products with less packing and recycle as much as possible. According to lots of surveys, most supermarkets and convenience stores now provide reusable bags for shoppers. Likewise, more and more people are having a sense of bringing their own tote bags, which can reduce plastic waste dumped into the environment. By reusing and recycling, we can help the environment become better and better.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that both national governments and individual people must play their part in looking after the environment.

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