IELTS task1 (PIE)

Question

The pie charts indicate the consistent of populations in different ages in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050. Overall, in both countries, 0-14 year-old people in 2050 will be less than the previous time.

In 2000, people in the 0-14 age group was the largest number in Yemen with 50.1%, which occupied a half, followed by 15-59 year-olds, taking up 46.3%. The smallest number was the population of people 60 and over, which was 3.6%. For Italy, 15-59 year old people represented third-fifth, which was 61.6%. People in the 60 and over age group stood for nearly a quarter with 24.1%.

In the projections, the number of people aged 15-59 will increase to 57.3% in Yemen in 2050. At the same time, the figure of 0-14 year-olds will decline to 37%. In addition, in Italy, the number of 15-59 year-old people will experience a similar trend, decreasing to 46.2%. However, the figure for people aged 60 and over will have growth to 42.3% in 2050. Moreover, 0-14 year-olds was one-tenth, which was 11.5%.

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The pie charts (how many) indicate (wrong word. This is not a good synonym.) the consistent (Incorrect word. It is not even close.) of populations in different ages (what are the ages?) in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050. Overall, in both countries, 0-14 year-old people in 2050 will be less than the previous time.

(Wrong paragraph structure. Do not describe any data in the first paragraph.)

Here is a formulaic outline for Task 1. Use it for all Task 1 essays.

Paragraph 1: Describe the figure or figures given. How many? What do they show?

To write paragraph 1, make a list of noun phrases which cover the essential elements of the figure.
For example, look at the noun phrases for this exercise. All are essential to completely describe the figure.

1. pie charts

2. four charts (two sets of two).

3. actual and forecast / projected data

4. population composition (or breakdown) by age group

5. three age groups

6. Italy and Yemen

7. 2000 and 2050

You see that this figure is too complicated to describe in one single sentence. It is very difficult to put all those noun phrases in one sentence. So, to be complete, you must write two or three sentences.

Here are three sentences that I have made from these noun phrases. You need to choose a verb for the main sentence. "Show" is the most natural, but synonyms for "show" can be used: depict, illustrate, compare, give, portray, plot, display, or present. Then you have to choose the grammatical positions of the noun phrases.

Sentence 1) Two pie charts, dated 2000 and 2050, compare a country's population broken down into three age groups.

Sentence 2) There are two countries shown: Italy, and Yemen.

Sentence 3) The age groups are children (0-14 years old), working age (15-59), and retirement age (59 and older).

The word count of this first paragraph is 47. That is 1/3 of the minimum word count for a Task 1 essay. Try to stay under 55 words in the first paragraph.

Here is the first paragraph:

Two pie charts, dated 2000 and 2050, compare a country's population broken down into three age groups. There are two countries shown: Italy, and Yemen. The age groups are children (0-14 years old), working age (15-59), and retirement age (59 and older).

Note that sentence 3 is not essential, but its purpose is to give names to the different age groups. I can use those names in the body paragraphs instead of the age values, which get rather cumbersome and awkward. Note that no data values are given in the first paragraph, only the noun phrases which describe the graphic.

Paragraph 2: Describe 2-3 significant observations in the data. One is not enough for a good Task 1 essay.

1. The proportion of children is forecast decrease in both countries.

2. (your second observation)

3. (your third observation)

Paragraph 3. Describe some particular details.

(The words "number" and "figure" are not good. Use percentage or proportion, which is actually what is shown in a pie chart. Numbers, such as 50 million or 3 thousand, can be plotted on line graphs. Avoid the use of "figure" entirely, because in the context of math and science, a figure is an illustration inserted into the text. )

In 2000, people in the 0-14 age group was the largest number (percentage) in Yemen, ~~with~~ 50.1%, ~~which occupied a half,~~ (repetitive) followed by 15-59 year-olds, taking up 46.3%. The smallest number was the population of people 60 and over, which was 3.6%. For Italy, 15-59 year old people represented third-fifth, (invalid word) which was 61.6%. People in the 60 and over age group stood for nearly a quarter with 24.1%.

In the projections, the number of people aged 15-59 will increase to 57.3% in Yemen in 2050. At the same time, the figure of 0-14 year-olds will decline to 37%. In addition, in Italy, the number of 15-59 year-old people will experience a similar trend, decreasing to 46.2%. However, the figure for people aged 60 and over will have growth to 42.3% in 2050. Moreover, 0-14 year-olds was one-tenth, which was 11.5%.

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