IELTS task 2 topic - Young leaders

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Topic:

Leaders and directors in an organization are normally older people. Some people think younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

Many people believe that young people should lead companies instead of the older ones. Personally, I completely disagree with this statement because those aged staffs with experiences can bring more advantages for a group.

It is obvious that experienced people have expert power - which can hardly be found in a young leader, to give right directions to their subordinates in work. As a result, an efficient working routine with controllable outcomes will be set up, making a better reputation for company. Furthermore, when an unexpected problem happens, an aged senior staff will be more quickly to find a feasible solution than the younger one since their problem-solving skill has been developed through years. For example, when facing an on-site issue in construction industry, a 20 years experience architect can sit at the office and tell the workers exactly what they can do. Meanwhile, it will take a lot of time for a 5 years leader to find the same solution.

Some people claim that young managers will be more creative in work and can propose positive changes for the improvement of company. Although this opinion is true in some cases, creativity also can be contributed by those older people in many ways. One effective method is that these senior staffs can encourage young employee to conduct their own ideas in working. By doing this, a strong relationship of mentor and mentee will be set to achieve something new in a productive way: the old will help the young on practical side of new idea.

In conclusion, I believe that old individuals should be chosen to lead a company rather than the young for certain reasons mentioned above.