IELTS Task 2 PLEASE CHECK MY ESSAY

Topic: Do you agree or disagree that celebrities are paid for too much money?

My Essay : Nowadays, the children have many activities to do in free time, such as join sports sport clubs, having music lessons, arts lessons and non-classrooms. Often they don’t have time for doing things that they like and leisure time activities. In this essay I will look at advantages and disadvantages of this and give my own opinion.

First, the children have planned activities for free time, they are more grown than other children. Second, they can improve their skills and team-working that are useful for future jobs. Third, often the parents have job and spent more time of day in work than they think that is better for their children be with friends. Fourth, children usually enjoy their activities, make friends and become well-developed people.

However, this topic has positive features but it has negative features. One reason is that, two many classes can make children bored. Famous proverb that says: “All work and no play makes jack a dull boy ” .

In addition, they have little time to be with their family, this reason can weak the child-family relationship. It is also important to give them time to relax, watch movie and daydreaming.Another reason is that, do these activities can make heavy stress which cause depression and illness in children.My own view is that we need to have a balanced. Children should participate in activities that they really like these which they can improve and augment their skills and also have enough time to enjoy their live, play with friends and be with family.