IELTS Task 2 Check

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While some people tend to accept unfortunate factors, such as unsuitable occupations or financial deficit, others think it is better to try and increase the quality of life. In my opinion, bad circumstances should be solved in order to achieve a certain level of happiness, as well as improve the life of the community in general.

To begin with, people are more likely to dream the unrealistic accomplishments. It will be more effective if people appreciate what they have at the moment, rather than lost themselves in vain hopes. No one can achieve their dream life immediately, without failures and suffers. An individual still can live happily as long as that person is satisfied with the current situation. Therefore, the society should be encouraged to accept unsatisfied elements, instead of complaining about it.

On the other hand, people should get over the low quality of life. An individual will feel happier and more satisfy if his or her living is better, such as a well-paid job and high standard of living. The wealthy will also acquire good reputation and others’ respect. In addition, money can improve people’s lives, both mentality and physically. Moreover, citizens can then take care of other family members and their lovers. Working on to enhance lives also has a positive affect on a whole society. A community with hard-working citizens will have a higher chance to develop a higher stage and expand.

In conclusion, accepting the bad factors in live is not really harmful. However, people will be more grateful if they try to work for a better future.