IELTS TASK 2-ANIMAL

The following is my essay. Please help me to incorrect and improve it. Thank you very much.

THE TOPIC:

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

THE ESSAY:

Animals have had generous impacts on all aspects of human life and animal-related arguments have been controversial in modern society. While some people suppose that to meet their needs for foods and experiments, humans should exploit animals, I support that it is unfair that animals are considered as a sacrifice for human needs and they should have the equal rights as humans.

Many people argue that it is necessary to slaughter animals for foods and to implement animal testing. In fact, nowadays, many farmers breed farm animals for foods such as meat, milk and butter which are main parts of daily diets. It is proven that foods from animals benefit humans’ health. For example, meat contains a large amount of protein which is vital when doing anything energetic. Furthermore, it could not doubt the paramount important role of animals in scientific research. There are a lot of medical breakthroughs invented through animal experiments such as blood transfusion and penicillin antibiotics which are used to save thousands of people.

However, I think that human should respect animals instead of over-exploiting them. Although animal threatens do not directly affect the existence of humanity, they have a great impact on other species. As a result, it can damage the ecosystem balance which humans are apart. Moreover, we should also respect animals’ life and they should have the same right as us. Both humans and all animals live on the earth together, therefore, humans do not the right to decide whether other species live or die.

In conclusion, although many individuals think that it is natural to scarify animals for food and research, I support that animals and humans should be equal in the rights instead of being considered as a sacrifice for others.