IELTS Task 1 Writing

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Please review my IELTS Task 1 Essay.

The table contains information from the three states in the USA, California, Utal and Florida about age (under 18 and over 60) in percentage; average per capita income in dollars; and population below the poverty line, in percentage.

Overall, Utal has the highest percentage of people aged under 18, and it is the state having the least percentage of population over 60. While there is no significant difference among the three states in the average per person income, there is relatively greater difference in their population below poverty line.

In detail, at 28 % Utal’s under-18 population is only a little less than the combined data point values of California and Florida. And, as for people aged over 60, at 23%, Florida leaves the remaining two trailing far behind, especially Utal where it is only 8%. Additionally, California with 23000 dollars leads the rest in the highest per person income, but it is also the state having the highest percentage of population below poverty line.