IELTS TASK 1: The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian mẹn and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of 6 various age group Austrialian female and male who had regular workout in the year 2010.

As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that women had the highest the numbers for people who engaged in physical ativities, exception to in term of teenagers group

In almost all groups, the percentage of women was higher than the figure for men. The only exception was for the age range between 15 and 24 year, 52,8% of males and 47,7% of females in this who participated in daily exercises.

The largest difference in data for people of the distinctive gender was recorded for the group from 35 to 44 years old, approximately for 13%. The opposite situation can be noticed in the seniors group ,only 0,4% female more than male go involeved in regular excercises, accounted for 46,7% and 47,1% in respectively.

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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of 6 six various age group (wrong form) Austrialian (wrong spelling) female (wrong form) and male (wrong form) who had regular workout (wrong form, also it's not a good synonym.) in the year 2010.

~~As can be seen from the graph, it is clearly evident that~~ (These words do not describe the graph. Only write factual information about the graph that you see.) women had the highest the (wrong usage) numbers for people who engaged in physical ativities, exception to in term of (wrong usage) teenagers (Wrong word. A 24-year-old is not a teenager.) group (missing punctuation)

In almost all groups, the percentage of women was higher than the figure for men. (You repeat the last sentences here. Avoid repetition.) The only exception was for the age range between 15 and 24 ~~year~~, 52,8% (Do not begin a sentence with a numeric value.) of males and 47,7% of females in this (missing word) who participated in daily exercises. (The underlined words is a noun phrase. It is not a sentence. Write only in full sentences.)

The largest difference in data for people of the distinctive gender (?? Which gender do you mean?) was recorded for the group from 35 to 44 years old, approximately for 13%. The opposite situation can be noticed in the seniors group ,only 0,4% female more than male go (wrong word) involeved in regular excercises, accounted (wrong form) for 46,7% and 47,1% in respectively.

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The following graph illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women who performed regular exercise in 2010.

Overall, the majority of women did particular more exercise in the old ages than men. The average of women between 45 to 54 years old was the highest percentages (53.3%) while the highest average (52.8) of men practiced their exercise in the young ages of 15 to 24.

As we can see, the percentages of women who did regular exercise activity was increased year by year except the ages of 64 and over which went down a little bit less performed. In the contrary, men in the ages of 35 to 44 started doing their exercise more and the percentages was increasing up to their ages as they get older.

It is clearly seen that the older they get, the more exercise they performed well to keep healthy. It is worth to mention that the number of male and female who are in 65 year old and over was almost nearly the same with 46.7% and 47.1% respectively.

IELTS TASK 1: The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian mẹn and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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