IELTS Task 1 (table)

Question

The table indicates the percentage of consumption in five countries on different items, namely food, drinks, tobacco; clothing, footwear and leisure, education in 2002.

It is noticeable that the greatest consumption was found in food, drinks, tobacco. While leisure and education cited at the least of spending.

In the year of 2002, Turkey had a trend in both three groups that were recommended. It cited at the greatest numbers in the first two categories, which remained at 32.14% and 4.35%. In the second place, Ireland expenditure of food, drinks, tobacco held a very approximately 29%. While in Italy, the amount spending on clothing, footwear was slightly higher, stayed at 9%.

As can be seen from the table, Sweden had the lowest rate in food, drinks, tobacco and clothing, footwear; which stayed at nearly 16% and over 5%. On the other hand, there was also a fall in the group relating to food, namely Italy and Spain. Ireland, Spain and Turkey were similarly remained at over 6% in clothing and footwear proportion. Nevertheless, in leisure, education group, Spain had 1.98% and was presented as the least. In this group also, the other countries just ranged from 2 to 3 percent.

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The table indicates (wrong word. Use list, compare, give or show) the percentage of consumption (wrong expression) in five countries on different items, namely food, drinks, tobacco; clothing, footwear and leisure, education in 2002. (Incomplete. What are the countries?)

Suggestion:

The table compares the amounts, in percentages, that consumers in five different countries spent in three different budget categories in one year, 2002. The countries listed are Ireland, Italy. Spain, Sweden and Turkey. The three budget categories are food/drinks/tobacco, clothing / footwear, and leisure / entertainment.

~~It is noticeable that~~ the greatest consumption (wrong word. People do not consume clothing.) was ~~found~~ in on food, drinks, tobacco. While leisure and education cited (wrong form, wrong word) at the least of spending. (That is a fragment, not a sentence.)

Suggestion:

Overall, the spending for these three categories amounts to less than half of their total spending. Of the categories listed, the largest percentage of the people's budgets in all countries went to food, drink and tobacco. That is in contrast to the leisure and entertainment category, which had the smallest.

~~In the year of 2002,~~ (Repetitious. You already told the reader the year. You do not need to repeat it.) Turkey had a trend (wrong word) in both three (both means two. It does not make sense to have "both three.") groups that were recommended. (wrong word. I don't understand this point. ) It cited at the greatest numbers in the first two categories, which were ~~remained at~~ 32.14% and 4.35%.

I think you were trying to make this point:

The Turks spent proportionately more than the citizens of all the other countries on two categories, namely food, drink and tobacco (about 32%) and leisure and entertainment (a little over 4%).

These three categories took a total of about 43% of their total budget.

In ~~the~~ second place, (second place according to what measure?) in Ireland, the expenditure for of food, drinks, tobacco ~~held~~ a very was approximately 29%. While in Italy, the amount spent ~~spending~~ on clothing, footwear was slightly higher, ~~stayed~~ at 9%. (9% is not slightly higher than 29%. You are not comparing numbers correctly.)

I think you wanted to write something like this:
Ireland came second after Turkey in the percentage their citizens spent on the food.drinks/tobacco category, at approximately 29%.

Spain, Italy and Sweden followed in third, fourth and fifth place, with 18.8%, 16.36% and 15.77% respectively.

~~As can be seen from the table,~~ (The reader knows you are describing the table.) Sweden had the lowest rate (wrong word. The data values are not rates.) in food, drinks, tobacco and clothing, footwear; which was ~~stayed at~~ nearly 16% and over 5%. On the other hand, there was also a fall (There is no decline or fall. A fall relates to time. There is no time dimension in this table.) in the group relating to food, namely Italy and Spain. Ireland, Spain and Turkey were similarly remained at (wrong verbs. The verbs "remain and stay" relate to changes over time. This table does not list different times. ) over 6% in clothing and footwear ~~proportion~~. Nevertheless, in leisure, education group, Spain had 1.98% and was presented as the least. In this group also, the other countries just ranged from 2 to 3 percent.

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