IELTS Task 1 - Report on 2 Pie charts

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Please help me review my report of these two pie charts. I am not very good at report analysing and writing. I hope to receive your constructive feedback for improvement. Thank you in advance!

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Question: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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My report:

The pie charts illustrate data on British students being able to speak other languages besides English at one tertiary education between 2000 and 2010.

Overall, while the percentages of those who can speak Spanish, Another language, and Two other languages increased between 2000 and 2010, the opposite trend was true for those of students speaking French and No other language. Moreover, the group of Spanish speaking students was the largest during the given time period.

In 2000, the percentage of students speaking Spanish accounted for a third of the total figure, which subsequently went up by 5% in 2010. Similarly, the proportions of bilingual, and multilingual students experienced a rise of 5% between these two years, from 15% to 20%, and 10% to 15% respectively.

In contrast, the percentage of French-speaking students dropped from one-fifth to 10% between 2000 and 2010. The figure for monolingual students also declined by half. In the meantime, the proportion of German-speaking students remained stable at 10% throughout the decade.

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AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The pie charts illustrate (wrong word. "Illustrate" means to make a picture.) data on British students being able to speak other languages besides English at one tertiary education (Tertiary education is not a location or school. It means studies at a higher level than high school) between (wrong word. The data does not come from 2001, 2002, 2003... These are "between" years) 2000 and 2010. (Your paragraph is incomplete. What languages are shown?)

Model paragraph:

The two pie charts compare the foreign language ability of British students at one university in England in 2000 and 2010. They break down the student population into five groups of language proficiency: bilingual in French, Spanish and German, or another language; trilingual; or knowing only English.

Overall, while the percentages of those who can speak Spanish, Another language, and Two other languages increased between 2000 and 2010, the opposite ~~trend~~ (You can't see a trend on pie charts with only two points in time.) was true for those of students speaking French and No other language. Moreover, the group of Spanish speaking (hyphenated) students was the largest during the given time period.

In 2000, the percentage of students speaking Spanish accounted for a little less than a third (A third is 33%.) of the total ~~figure~~, (Wrong word. The figure has two pie charts.) which ~~subsequently~~ went up by 5% in 2010. Similarly, the proportions of bilingual, and multilingual students experienced (Proportions don't have experiences. Ony living creatures have experiences, see or witness things. Avoid anthropomorphism in Task 1 essays. They are not appropriate for a math/science context.) a rise of 5% between these two years, from 15% to 20%, and 10% to 15% respectively.

In contrast, the percentage of French-speaking students dropped from one-fifth to 10% between 2000 and 2010. The figure (Wrong word. The figure has two pie charts.) for monolingual students also declined by half. In the meantime, the proportion of German-speaking students remained the same ~~stable~~ at 10% throughout the decade. (Wrong expression. Throughout means at all times. You don't have any data from the years 2003, 2004, 2005 or 2006. The percentage may have been higher or lower in those years.)

Illustration of vocabulary words for Task 1. Profits of a company.

Trend A trend is a continuous general increase or decrease over time.

Fluctuation: Fluctuation is deviation of data values from a trend line. It can be random or cyclical.

Correlation: Correlation is the degree that two lines go up and down together.

Variation: Change in data values change over time.

The profits of a company over a five-year period are shown in the line graph. This company sells two products: sunscreen and umbrellas.

In the summer, they sell a lot of sunscreen, but not many umbrellas. In the winter, they sell a lot of umbrellas, but not much sunscreen. The company's overall profits have a strong positive trend (yellow line) over the five years. There is a small seasonal fluctuation in the total profits (dark blue line), but large fluctuations in profits from each product. (red/green lines) The profits earned from each product are negatively correlated.

These curves (A and B) have a positive correlation:

These curves have a negative correlation:

IELTS Task 1 - Report on 2 Pie charts

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