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Answer.The amounts of electricity generated and spent by the top ten countries in 2014 are plotted in the bar graph.Apart from Germany, all other nations produced more than the amount that they consumed.China ranked first with 5398 billion kWh produced and 5322 billion used, which is more than the amount of electricity of the next 2 countries on the list combined. The USA came second, generated 4099 billion kWh and utilized 211 kWh less than the amount generated, which is about four times as much as those of Russia and Japan.India's domestic electricity's production and usage was 871 and 698.8 billion kWh, respectively. In comparison, the last 5 nations' input and output of electricity were much lower, ranging only from 485.1 to 618.9 billion kWh in terms of production with Canada's figure at the top and Korea. Rep at the bottom and 449.5 to 582.2 kWh regarding consumption with Germany expended the highest amount and Korea. Rep spent the least electricity.

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The amounts of electricity generated and spent (wrong word. We spend money. We spend time. We do not spend energy.) by the top ten countries in 2014 are plotted in the bar graph.

Apart from Germany, all other nations produced more than the amount that they consumed. ( India and Canada had the largest difference, producing about 24% more than they consumed. )

China ranked first with 5398 billion kWh produced and 5322 billion used, which is more than the amount of electricity of the next 2 two countries on the list combined (the US and Russia), (and more than seven times the median value of about 700 bn kWh.). The USA came second, ~~generated~~ generating 4099 billion kWh ~~and utilized 211 kWh less than the amount generated~~, which is about four times as much as those of Russia or ~~and~~ Japan, ranking third and fourth respectively.

India's domestic electricity's (wrong form) production and usage was 871 and 698.8 billion kWh, respectively. In comparison, the last 5 nations' input and output (wrong usage) of electricity were much lower, ranging ~~only~~ from only 485.1 to 618.9 billion kWh in terms of production with Canada~~'s figure~~ at the top and Korea. Rep at the bottom and 449.5 to 582.2 kWh regarding consumption (Your sentence became incomprehensible here.) with Germany expended (wrong word) the highest amount and Korea. Rep spent the least electricity.

It is better to separate the comparisons of generation and consumption separately; otherwise it gets very confusing.

Model essay:

The amounts of electricity generated and spent (wrong word. We spend money. We spend time. We do not spend energy.) by the top ten countries in 2014 are plotted in the bar graph.

Apart from Germany, all other nations produced more than the amount that they consumed. ( India and Canada

The countries produced more than the amount that they consumed, except for Germany. India and Canada had the largest surplus generation, producing about 24% more than they consumed. Germany, which ranked ninth on the list, consumed about 10% more than it produced.

Among the top five countries (China, US, Russia, Japan and India) China came in first with 5398 bn kWh produced, more than the combined amount of the next two countries on the list (the US and Russia), and more than seven times the median value (about 700). Second-ranking USA produced 4099, about four times as much as either third- or fourth- ranked Russia (1057) and Japan (936). These countries produced up to 10 percent more electricity than they consumed. Russia had the smallest excess, less than 1% (1057 versus 1038). India rounded up the top five, with 871 production and 700 consumption, respectively. Note India's large excess production of 171 bn kWh.

The remaining five countries (Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Republic of Korea) had electricity production ranging from 620 to 485 and a narrow range in their consumption values, ranging from about 500 to 450.

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