Ielts task 1 (please help me correct this)

The graph demonstrates the most advanced academic education granted by females and males during the employable population between 2001 and 2002 in Wales.

For the purpose of this data set, males were highest in the GCE A level while females were foremost in GCSE grade A*-C. By contrast, both genders were lowest in higher education qualifications.

As can be seen, the proportion of men who succeeded in having a GCE A or equivalent criteria (28%) was significantly twice compared to the women's data (14%). Besides, the opposite pattern was shown in GCSE A*-C as the women percentage was nearly a third whereas almost two-fifths of men were recorded in the same level.

Furthermore, it is obvious that the two genders’ figure was lowest in taking higher education qualification which both lower than 10% with only 8% of males and 9% of females to be specific. In addition, the statistic in no qualification was recorded to be a quarter in females while the value of men was 5% lower, at exactly 20%.