IELTS TASK 1 - PIE CHART

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I'm preparing for IELTS exam next month and I answered 2 questions in task 1. Could any one help me check them please?

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The first chart compares the percentage of energy consumed for particular purposes in Australian household. The second chart shows the share of greenhouse gas emissions for which each energy use accounted.

It is clear that heating and water heating in Australian household consume the most energy. In addition, water heating and using other appliances are the two main sources of greenhouse gas emissions.

Heating is the most energy-consuming activity in an average household, accounting for 42% of the total energy, while the percentage of energy used by water heating is 12% lower, at 30%. Meanwhile, the share of energy used for cooling (2%) is similar to that for lighting (4%). Furthermore, other appliances consume 15% of total energy , whereas only 7% of energy consumption is for regrigeration operation.

Water heating and the use of other appliances make up the greatest percentage of greenhouse gas emissions, at 32% and 28% respectively. In contrast, lighting produces only 8% of the total amount of greenhouse gases, compared to a mere 3% for cooling. At the same time, the emissions of greenhouse gases released from using refrigeration and heating are almost the same, comprising about 15% of total emissions.

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The alternative:

The two charts give information about Australian household energy use and greenhouse gas emissions from that energy use.

It is clear that most energy is consumed for heating and water heating. Additionally, water heating is the main source of greenhouse gas emissions.

In terms of how energy is used, the percentage of energy provided for heating is highest, at 42%, while the figure for water heating is slightly lower, at 30%. Other appliances consume 15% of total energy, whereas 7% of household energy consumption is for refrigeration. Meanwhile, cooling and lighting account for the smallest shares of the total amount of energy, at 2% and 4%, respectively.

Regarding to greenhouse gas emissions, water heating generates the largest share of greenhouse gases (32%), while 28% of the emissions is released from the use of other appliances. Heating and refrigeration produce a similar percentage of the emissions, at around 15%. Meanwhile, cooling and lighting make up only 2% and 4% of the total emissions respectively.

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AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The first chart ~~compares the~~ shows a breakdown by percentage of energy consumed for particular purposes in Australian household. The second chart shows the ~~share of~~ relative amounts of greenhouse gas emissions per usage. ~~for which each energy use accounted~~.

~~It is clear that~~ Heating and water heating in Australian hou

~~It is clear that~~ Heating and water heating in Australian household consume the most energy, accounting for almost 75% of the total. ~~In addition,~~ But heating is not a major source of greenhouse gas emissions. Water heating and ~~using~~ other appliances are the two main sources ~~of greenhouse gas emissions~~.

Heating is the most energy-consuming activity in an average household, accounting for 42% of the total energy, while the percentage of energy used by water heating is 12% lower, at 30%. Meanwhile, the share of energy used for cooling (2%) is similar to that for lighting (4%). Furthermore, other appliances consume 15% of total energy , whereas only 7% of energy consumption is for regrigeration ~~operation~~.

Water heating and the use of other appliances make up the greatest percentage of greenhouse gas emissions, at 32% and 28% respectively. In contrast, lighting produces only 8% of the total amount of greenhouse gases, compared to a mere 3% for cooling. At the same time, the emissions of greenhouse gases released from using refrigeration and heating are almost the same, comprising about 15% of total emissions.

You did describe the superficial aspects of the graphs, just telling the numbers that the reader could see for themselves. However, a much better essay would make deeper, more significant comparisons. For example, which appliances were the worst polluters, not in absolute terms, but in relative terms? That is, for every unit of energy consumed, which ones emitted the largest amounts of polluting gasses? Which appliances polluted the least?

You could tell the reader about efficiency measures of these appliances in terms of the amount of greenhouse gasses emitted versus the amount of energy consumed. The most polluting appliances, tied for first place, were lighting and refrigeration, which consumed 11% of the household energy, but were responsible for 22% of the emissions. That is a "pollution efficiency rating" of a factor of 2. Other appliances (not identified individually) were only slightly better. Heating was the least polluting; it contributed only 15% of the gasses while consuming 42% of the energy. So its rating would be a factor of about 0.33, or 6 times better than the worst.

Chalk piano 932 · Answer

The pie charts compare the mean proportion of energy use in six different items and production of green house gases caused by the use these energies in the Australia.

Overall, all the household things produces more percentage of unwanted gases compared to their consumption of energy except heating. It is also worth mentioning that heating and water heating uses most energy while water heating and other appliances seems to be main reason of producing hazardous gases .

To begin with, 42% of energy, which is the greatest volume amongst the all, consumes by heating,produces only 15% of unwanted gases at all. Other appliances, on the other hand ,originates to maximum amount of green house gases at 28%,consumed only half energies . Moreover, water heating uses 30% of total energy, is responsible to produce a similar number of gases.

With regards to the figures lighting and refrigeration, uses only 4% and 7%, produces unwanted gases exactly doubled at 8% and 14%. Similarly, very small amount of energy used for cooling at 2%, accounted just 1% more to produce gases,reaching 3%.

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