IELTS TASK 1: Line graph

Question

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.  The line graph demonstrates the percentage of senior people in three countries from three different continents namely Japan, Sweden and the USA over a course of a century starting from 1940 to 2040.According to the graph above, it is obvious that all the three countries have witnessed an upward trend in the population of elderly. The senior population in Japan is predicted to be the highest out of the three countries in the future.At the beginning, proportion of senior people in the USA accounted for nearly 10 percent in 1940. Between 1940 and 2020, the number has gradually rose to 15 percent. It is forecast to climb to 24 percent in 2040.Similarly, the same trend of increase in number of the elderly can be seen in Sweden. The figure stood at around 6 percent in 1940 and then will jump over three times higher by 2020. By the end of the graph’s time frame, population of older people in this country is expected to reach 25 percent.By contrast, at the 45-year- initial period of the time frame starting from 1940, percentage of the senior population in Japan underwent a slight decrease from 5 downto 2.5 percent in 1985, which was also marked as the lowest point of the whole graph. From 1985 to 2030, the senior population has gone up to 10 percent. Afterwards, the number will increase quite rapidly and reach a peak at 28 percent in 2040, which will be higher than the two remained countries.

Poster · Accepted Answer

yirapyirapThe line graph demonstrates

'Demonstrates' in this context roughly means 'proves', so is inappropriate.

Word count : 252. I would question whether there is time in an IELTS exam to write this much, given that Task 2 is worth two-thirds of the marks.

yirapyirap senior people

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/senior-citizen

'Senior' might mean over-60, over 65, or over pension age, whatever that is, and so is inaccurate. There is no penalty for repeating labels from the diagram, provided the phrase is three words or less.

yirapyirap namely Japan, Sweden and the USA

This is an interpolation and needs to be comma'd off.

yirapyirapover a course of a century

This phrase states the period is one hundred years, so we do not need '2040' later on.

yirapyirapAccording to the graph above, it is obvious that ... witnessed

See my comments in reply to previous submission. Not much point in asking for help if you take no notice of corrections.

Your overview fails to note that (1) the rankings have changed, (2) the rate of change accelerates in the final two decades, or (3) there is a sudden jump in Japan's projections.

yirapyirapthe same trend of increase in number of the elderly

It is the proportion which has been increasing, not the absolute number of elderly. For all we know the overall population of Japan may have been declining, but the proportion of elderly increasing.

yirapyirapjump over three times higher

'Jump' implies a sharp increase: see (3) above. "Triple" or rise threefold, shows a threefold rise.

yirapyirappopulation of older people

Missing article. "Older" people is inaccurate cf "senior". There is nothing to be gained by paraphrasing if it is inaccurate; quite the reverse.

yirapyirapat the 45-year- initial period

Incorrect preposition. Extra hyphen. Why not: during 45 years up to 19xx ...

yirapyirapdownto

Two words.

yirapyirapwas also marked

I see no special mark.

yirapyiraphas gone

Incorrect tense.

yirapyirap the two remained countries.

Use present active participle.

Focus more on direct comparisons and supporting the statements in the overview. Something more like: The proportions for USA and Sweden showed some correlation for much of the period, except from 1990 to 2030, where the proportion for Sweden forged ahead and overtook the USA result.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The line graph demonstrates (wrong word) the percentage of senior (wrong word, unless you define it first. ) people in three countries from three different continents namely, Japan, Sweden and the USA over a course of a century starting from 1940 to 2040.

~~According to the graph above, it is obvious that~~ (Delete these useless words. They do not describe the figure. Also "obvious" is your opinion. You should not write any opinions in Task 1.) all the three countries have witnessed (Do not use anthropomorphic verbs in Task 1. The verbs you should avoid are "see, witness and experience" These are not good for a science/math context.) an upward trend in the population of elderly. The senior population in Japan is predicted to be the highest (misleading. It is the proportion or percentage of the population, not the absolute numbers. For example, assume the USA has 300 million people. and 20% are over 65. That is 60 million people. Japan, in comparison, has 100 million people. Suppose 50% are over 65. That is 50 million, a smaller number than in the USA. ) out of the three countries in the future.

At the beginning, proportion of senior people in the USA accounted for nearly 10 percent in 1940. (Do not use two different adverbs of time in the same sentence.) Between 1940 and 2020, it ~~the number has~~ gradually rose to 15 percent~~. It~~ and is forecast to climb to 24 percent in 2040.

Similarly, the same trend of increase in number of the elderly (misleading) can be seen in Sweden. The figure stood at around 6 percent in 1940 and then will jump over three times higher by 2020. By the end of the graph’s time frame, population of older people in this country is expected to reach 25 percent.

By contrast, at the 45-year- initial period of the time frame starting from 1940, percentage of the senior population in Japan underwent a slight decrease from 5 downto 2.5 percent in 1985, which was also marked as the lowest point of the whole graph. From 1985 to 2030, the senior population has gone up to 10 percent. Afterwards, the number will increase quite rapidly and reach a peak There is no peak on the graph. A peak has lower data values both before and after the peak. ) at 28 percent in 2040, which will be higher than the two remained (wrong word) countries.

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