IELTS TASK 1: Line chart (Wheat Exports)

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The graph shows the wheat exports of three separate regions from 1985 to 1990. The three regions are Australia, Canada, and Europe.

Overall, Australia had a decrease in the total of exported wheat, whereas there was a general increase in wheat exports in Europe. Additionally, although there were some variations in the amount of wheat exported, wheat exports remained relatively the same in Canada.

Australia’s wheat export figure started at 15 million tons in 1985 and subsequently rose to about 16 million tons in 1986. Afterward, there was a linear decline in the total of exported wheat from around 16 million in 1986 to approximately 11 million tons in 1990. By contrast, The European Community exported around 17 million tons of wheat in 1985. Then, the total of exported wheat dropped to about 14 million tons in 1986, hitting a plateau at around 15 million tons over the next 2 years. There was an upward increase in wheat exports over a three-year span, rising to just above 20 million tons in 1990. In addition, Canadians shipped approximately 19 million tons of wheat in 1985, which decreased to 17 million tons in 1986. Between 1986 to 1988, the figure showed a linear upward trend, reaching a peak at exactly 25 million tons in 1988. The figure then plummeted to only around 14 million tons in 1989. This number then quickly rose to 19 million by the next year.

(I know that the report is too long and I need to reduce the word count. So, I would like to hear some advice on how to shorten the report without changing too much of its content. Also, tips to improve on this type of graph would be nice.)

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The graph ~~shows~~ plots / compares / shows the wheat exports of ~~three separate regions~~ ~~from 1985 to 1990. The three regions are~~ Australia, Canada, and the European Community from 1985 to 1990. (Note the decrease in word count with more precise information. 22 to 17 words)

Overall, Australia had a decrease in the total of exported wheat, whereas there was a general increase in wheat exports in Europe. Additionally, although there were some variations in the amount of wheat exported, wheat exports remained relatively the same in Canada. ( 42 words)

Overall, Australia's exports decreased, whereas Europe's went up. Additionally, although it varied a lot, the 1990 amount for Canada was about the same as in 1985. (26 words, same information )

Australia’s wheat exports figure (wrong word) started at 15 million tons in 1985 and subsequently rose to about 16 million tons in 1986. Afterward, there was a linear decline ~~in the total of exported wheat~~ from around 16 million in 1986 to approximately 11 million tons in 1990. By contrast, The European Community exported around 17 million tons of wheat in 1985. Then, it ~~the total of exported wheat~~ dropped to about 14 to 15 million tons between 1986 and 1988. s ~~in 1986, hitting a plateau at around 15 million tons over the next 2 years~~. After 1988, there was an upward increase ~~in wheat exports over a three-year span~~, ~~rising~~ to just above 20 million tons in 1990. In addition, (wrong phrase) Canadians shipped approximately 19 million tons of wheat in 1985, which decreased to 17 million tons in 1986. Between 1986 to 1988, ~~the figure showed a linear upward trend~~, it went up by 4 million tons per year reaching a peak at ~~exactly~~ 25 million tons in 1988. ~~The figure then plummeted~~ (Yellow highlight - wrong usage) It fell to its low of only around 14 million tons in 1989 and in 1990 rebounded ~~. This number~~ ~~then quickly rose~~ to 19 million tons. ~~by the next year.~~

Your third paragraph was 173 words, greater than the minimum word count for the entire essay! Look at all the needless repetition and verbiage that can be excised. Use pronouns!!!

The corrected version (below) is 145 words, but it is still far too detailed and verbose.. The instructions are "summarize" Summarize means DO NOT REPORT EVERY DETAIL. The report can be much much better if you concentrate on the big picture and relevant comparisons.

Australia’s wheat exports started at 15 million tons in 1985 and subsequently rose to about 16 million tons in 1986. Afterward, there was a linear decline from around 16 million in 1986 to approximately 11 million tons in 1990. By contrast, The European Community exported around 17 million tons of wheat in 1985. Then, it dropped to about 14 to 15 million tons between 1986 and 1988. After 1988, there was an upward increase rising to just above 20 million tons in 1990. In addition, Canadians shipped approximately 19 million tons of wheat in 1985, which decreased to 17 million tons in 1986. Between 1986 to 1988, it went up by 4 million tons per year reaching a peak at 25 million tons in 1988.It fell to its low of only around 14 million tons in 1989 and in 1990 rebounded to 19 million tons.

The completely revised essay is 188 words. The original, 235.

The graph plots the wheat exports of Australia, Canada, and the European Community from 1985 to 1990.

Overall, Australia's exports decreased, whereas Europe's went up. Additionally, although it varied a lot, the 1990 amount for Canada was about the same as in 1985.

Australia’s wheat exports started at 15 million tons in 1985 and subsequently rose to about 16 million tons in 1986. Afterward, there was a linear decline from around 16 million in 1986 to approximately 11 million tons in 1990. By contrast, The European Community exported around 17 million tons of wheat in 1985. Then, it dropped to about 14 to 15 million tons between 1986 and 1988. After 1988, there was an upward increase rising to just above 20 million tons in 1990. In addition, Canadians shipped approximately 19 million tons of wheat in 1985, which decreased to 17 million tons in 1986. Between 1986 to 1988, it went up by 4 million tons per year reaching a peak at 25 million tons in 1988. It fell to its low of only around 14 million tons in 1989 and in 1990 rebounded to 19 million tons.

IELTS TASK 1: Line chart (Wheat Exports)

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