Ielts task 1 (Hope someone check my essay)

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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade *-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.The tables show how many coffee and bananas sold in five different countries between 1999 and 2004.Overall, the UK sold the largest amount of coffee, while the sales figures in Switzerland was the lowest in the year 1999 and 2004. At the same time, most of the bananas were sold by Switzerland; however, Belgium and Sweden sold the lowest number of bananas during the whole period.According to the first table, in 1999, the UK was the biggest trader for coffee( 1.5 million euros), while sales figures for coffee in Sweden, was around half of the UK's figures, only 0.8 million euros. After five years later, the UK was still the main trader for coffee and the number of coffee sales had a significant increase, which was 20 million euros in 2004. The coffee sales in Sweden remained the lowest, only increased by 0.2 million euros in the last year.In terms of bananas, the sales number in Switzerland experienced a remarkable went up, from 15 to 47 million euros in five years, which increased more than three times than its initial figures. Finally, Sweden and Denmark presented a different pattern, with decreased by 0.8 and 1.1 million euros respectively.

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???The tables show how many coffee and bananas sold in five different countries between 1999 and 2004.

The tables show how many coffee and bananas sold in five different countries between 1999 and 2004.

Coffee is non-count, so you can't write "many coffee". You can say "how many kilograms of coffee" because we can count kilograms.

We can count bananas. If you say "how many bananas?" the answer would be a number like 1,872,345. Each banana is one item. That is a lot of bananas.

"Between 1999 and 2004" means the five years in total: 1999, 2000, 2001, 2002, 2003 and 2004.

You say the table lists the number of bananas sold in those 5 years. If they sold 100,000 bananas each year, the total would be 500,000.

That is not what the tables show. You did not describe the tables correctly.

Please try again.

???Overall, the UK sold the largest amount of coffee,

That is not correct. Coffee plants do not grow in the UK. Countries do not sell coffee. The small writing at the bottom of the lower table tells you that "Fair Trade farmers in developing countries" grew the bananas and coffee and sold them.

???while the sales figures in Switzerland was the lowest in the year 1999 and 2004.

Your verb (was - singular) and subject (figures - plural) do not agree. Also you wrote "year" (singular) but gave two dates: 1999, 2004 (plural).

The superlative "lowest" needs more than two things to compare. For example, if you compared the sales figures in five different years, one year might be the lowest of the five. What are you comparing? How many different things are you comparing.

??? At the same time, most of the bananas were sold by Switzerland; however, Belgium and Sweden sold the lowest number of bananas during the whole period.

Here is the same issue. These countries did not sell bananas. Farmers in Switzerland can't grow bananas. It is too cold there to grow bananas.

Also, you are talking about numbers of bananas. The tables do not have numbers of bananas.

???According to the first table,

You need to tell the reader in the first paragraph how many tables you will write about, and what is in each table.

Task 1 is a very challenging exercise. Please write and post your essay again, or ask questions about how to describe these tables.
You have a good structure to your essay, but your writing is incorrect.

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