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The bar chart shows how many people aged 25-34 either rent or have bought a house in the UK. Furthermore, it illustrates this change over an eleven-year period.

The number of homeowners within this age range has decreased substantially since 2004. In 2004, nearly 60% owned their own home, whereas in 2014 this dropped to under 40%. There was a gradual decline in homeownership over the eleven-year period which was more significant from 2009 to 2014. Only in 2011 and 2012, did the number remain stable at just over 40%.

The rental market, in comparison, has increased dramatically over the same period. Between 2004 and 2014, the number of people renting has risen by nearly 30%. Again, this has been a gradual increase in most years, rising by just a few percents each year. In 2014, the rental market reached a peak at just under 50%.

Overall, for people in the age group between 25 and 34 in England, the rental market is increasing each year, whereas the buyers' market is decreasing.