IELTS TASK 1 - BAR CHART

The bar chart illustrates the proportions of the job was chosen by male and female employees in England in 2005.
Overall, the percentage of men workers chose skilled trades was highest than another job while administrative and secretarial were selected by women workers with the tallest percentage in a chart.
As can be seen from the bar chart, the proportion of male who is skilled traders outnumbered female by ten to one (about 20% against 2%). Men workers played an important part in managers and senior officials (approximately 18% against about 11% for women). Also, nearly 14 percent of men chose professional to do this as opposed to exactly 11 percent in women did this job. For processing, plant, and machinery, 12 percent of men did it, more than sixfold women worked it.
In comparison, women played a meaningful role in associate professional and technical, personal, sales and customer service. And also in administrative and secretarial, we can see exactly how this job was dominated highly by the female. There were more women by a ratio of approximately 4 to 1 (about 22% compared to around 5% in men).
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