IELTS Task 1

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The table shows the number of visitorsto Ashdown museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts illustrate the results of surveys of visitors satisfaction. it is clearly that, the highest record was for both meseum's visitors and Satisfied people's side in the chart.

To begin, the highest recording of people in the table presnted in the year after about 92.000. Whereas the year before scored 74.000.

According for results in both pie charts, the year after refurbishment witnessed the highest record in Satisfied field about 40%. As regards in the year before the highest percentage marked in Dissatsfied part 40%. However, the year after Very satisfied visitors experienced about 35%, whereas in the year before Satisfied people ranked 30%. Interestingly though, Dissatisfied visitors in the year after was 15%. Similarly, in the year before Very satisfied saw the same average 15%. Although in the year before Very dissatisfied figured only 10%, in the year after Very dissatisfied visitors tested 5%. Also, in the year before non-responded segment tried 5% which is the same mark in the year after.

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Your essay has many problems with grammar, spelling and sentence structure. I have highlighted the words with errors. Most of the sentences are very poor English with incorrect words and phrasing. I can understand some of it, but with difficulty.

Task 1 is a very challenging test even for advanced English students. You are not quite ready for the required level of English proficiency.

The table shows the number of visitorsto Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The pie charts illustrate the results of surveys of visitors satisfaction (When were the surveys?) . it is clearly that, the highest record (wrong word) was for both meseum's visitors and Satisfied people's side in the chart. (Which chart? There are two. "satisfied people's side" is incorrect. I really can't understand this sentence.)

To begin, the highest recording (wrong word.) of people in the table presnted in the year after about 92.000. (" after about 92.000" is an incorrect phrase.) Whereas the year before scored (Wrong word. Score is for a game. ) 74.000.

According for (wrong word. ) results in both pie charts, the year after refurbishment witnessed the highest record in Satisfied field about 40%. As regards in the year before the highest percentage ("the year before this highest percentage" is incorrect.) marked in Dissatsfied part 40%. However, the year after Very satisfied visitors ("the year after very satisfied visitors" is not good.) experienced about 35%, whereas in the year before Satisfied people ranked (wrong word. Rank is used when there is a list from highest to lowest. ) 30%. Interestingly though, Dissatisfied visitors in the year after was 15%. Similarly, in the year before Very satisfied saw the same average (wrong word. There are no averages in the pie chart.) 15%. Although in the year before Very dissatisfied figured only 10%, in the year after Very dissatisfied visitors tested (Wrong word. This is not a test.) 5%. Also, in the year before non-responded segment tried 5% which is the same mark in the year after.

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