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The chart gives data about some issues people concern when they start to live in a new country.

The greatest problem with people from 18 to 34 is about the money they get per month, which experienced by about 34% of the people in this age group, however, this figure takes off slightly to
35% when people ages are between 35 and 54 and it soon falls to nearly 30% with people older than 54.

On the other hand, most people over 34 cares about their health. There are around 36% of people aged between 35 and 54 worried about healthcare and this figure is fractionally lower when people ages begin from 55. In contrast, younger people do not pay too much attention to that problem. They also infrequently think about sorting out their kids’ schools, but it soon becomes a key concern with nearly one-fifth of people over 35 years. This figure drops sharply when they are at the age of 55 and older.

To sum up, it seems that in every age group, people mostly look for money and their healthcare. For young people, money is the most essential things, while for older people it is the other one.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The (what kind of chart?) chart gives data about some issues people concern (wrong phrase) when they start to live in a new country.

The greatest problem with people from 18 to 34 is about the money they get per month, (No, it is "sorting out finances." That is not the same as their monthly income.) which (missing word) experienced by about 34% of the people in this age group, however, this ~~figure~~ takes off slightly (wrong phrasing) to
35% when people ages (wrong phrasing) are between 35 and 54 and it soon falls (It is not a line graph. "Falling" means going down over time.) to nearly 30% with people older than 54.

On the other hand, most people over 34 cares (wrong form) about their health. There are around 36% of people aged between 35 and 54 worried about healthcare and this ~~figure~~ is fractionally lower when people ages begin from 55. In contrast, younger people do not pay too much attention to that problem. They also infrequently think about sorting out their kids’ schools, but it soon becomes a key concern with nearly one-fifth of people over 35 years. This ~~figure~~ drops sharply when they are at the age of 55 and older.

(Your description implies that the data came from a survey which tracked a group of people as they got older. This is certainly not the case. You need to treat this as a snapshot of data at one point in time with the results over a survey of many people of different ages. )

To sum up, it seems that in every age group, people mostly look for money (They are not looking for money.) and their healthcare. For young people, money is the most essential things, (wrong form) while for older people it is the other one.

Here is a model essay: Paragraph 1 describes the chart. Paragraphs 2 and 3 describe the data.

The bar chart shows three areas of concern for people in three different age groups when they immigrate to a new country. The areas of concern are: first, sorting out finances; second, sorting out healthcare; and third, finding schools for their children. The age groups are 18-34, 35-54 and over 55. There are nine bars, one each for the different combinations of age group and category of concern. The height of each bar is the percentage of the people in that age group that have that concern. The range of values on the chart is 3% to 37%.

Overall, the middle age group has the highest level of problems among all age groups in all three categories. Healthcare stands out as the largest problem area. It is of highest concern to the middle and older age groups with 37% and 36% respectively, and the second-highest area of concern for the youngest group, with 34%. On the other hand, the category "finding schools for children" is the area of lowest concern, and it is also the category with the largest difference between the three groups. Only 2% of the oldest group have this problem and 6% of the youngest group. About 18% of the middle group are concerned about schooling.

Finances is the largest issue for the youngest group with 34% concerned about it, but it is also significant for the middle group with 35%. About 28% of the oldest group are concerned with arranging their finances.

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