Ielts task 1

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I am preparing for my Ielts exam next month. Can you help me to review my essay ? Thank you so much.

The given line graph illustrates the percentage of population that is older than 65 years old in Japan, Swenden and the US between 1940 and 2040.

As can be seen from the graph, all countries see an overall upward trend in the proportion of the population aged 65 and above.

In the USA, the percentage of senior population experienced a steady rise from 8% to 15% from 1940 to 1980 . In the next 40 years, the figure levels off around 15%. Untilmately, a sudden surge from 15% to 23% is to be expected between 2020 and 2040.

Swenden also experience the same growth in the period of 1940 and 1980. However, from 1980 to 2040, the figure fluctuates wildly and end at 25% by 2040.

Unlike the two mentioned countries, Japan's senior population percentage levels off around 5% from 1940 to 2000 then suddenly soars to 28% in 2040.

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In Task 1, the student is asked to describe a figure or table to a university professor without any opinions or conclusions. The essay must be directed to that purpose. The language must be dispassionate, objective and, ideally, mathematical. Avoid literary techniques such as personification. You can demonstrate these language skills in Task 2. A calculator is extremely useful for Task 1.

The ~~given line graph illustrates~~ ~~the~~ percentages of the population that are older than 65 ~~years old~~ in Japan, Swenden and the US between 1940 and 2040 are plotted on this line graph. The data is extrapolated beyond the year for which data is available.

~~As can be seen from the graph,~~ (Extra words that are not relevant. ) All countries had ~~see~~ an overall upward trend ~~in the proportion of the population aged 65 and above~~. (You already wrote what is on the graph. You do not need to repeat it.)

In the USA, the percentage of senior population rose steadily ~~experienced a steady rise~~ from 8% to 15% from 1940 to 1980 . In the next 40 years, ~~the figure~~ it levels off around 15%. Untilmately, a sudden surge (In describing graphs and charts to a university professor, do not use flamboyant or florid language such as "sudden surge." Use objective mathematical terms. e.g Around 2020, the growth rate is forecast to change from zero to 0.4% per annum, so the ending value shown is 23% in 2040.) from 15% to 23% is to be expected between 2020 and 2040.

Swenden also ~~experience~~ had the same (same as what?) growth in the period of 1940 and 1980. However, from 1980 to 2040, the figure fluctuates wildly (Florid language. Use objective, measured terms.) and end at 25% by 2040.

~~Unlike the two mentioned countries,~~ Japan's senior population percentage levels off around 5% from 1940 to 2000 then suddenly soars (Florid language.) to 28% in 2040.

The word "fluctuate" is seldom justified in Task 1.

Here are two graphic illustrations of "fluctuate." One is random fluctuation; the other is sinusoidal (regular) fluctuation.

Learn mathematical vocabulary words that describe the shapes of curves. They will be useful for line graphs because you can usually fit one of these shapes to the whole graph or ranges of it. For example, in the population growth graph, Japan's population growth is exponential between 1985 and 2030. The USA's population growth is linear between 2018 and 2040.

Linear, Exponential, Logarithmic

Learn to "fit" these shapes to the line graph given in the task.

Example: A piecewise linear fit (green lines) to this graph of home ownership. There are three trends: increasing, flat (no trend) and decreasing. There is some random year-to-year variation, but this is normal for actual data. The slope of each line can be calculated and stated in your essay.

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