IELTS graph writing - please take a look, thank you so much

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The chart shows the annual GDP growth rates in 3 countries from 2007 to 2010.Answer:The bar chart illustrates 3 different nations’ percentage of growth in yearly GDP over a four–year period beginning in 2007.Overall, it can be seen that the annual GDP rate in Tunisia decreased, whereas Japan’s witnessed a reversed pattern over the years. Also, Ecuador had its figure fluctuating throughout the course.In the year 2007, Tunisia’s DGP growth was the most significant, by over 6%, nearly doubling that of Ecuador and tripling Japan’s. In the next year, the upturn in Tunisia’s yearly GDP declined by 2.0%, being slightly higher than Japan’s at that time. Ecuador’s GDP rise uplifted to 5%, the highest figure of all in that due course.Over the 2 following years, the value of GDP growth in Tunisia kept dropping until eventually stopping at 3%. Meanwhile, Japan’s statistics escalated to 6.5%, surpassing Tunisia’s initial value in 2007. The growth in GDP of Ecuador plummeted to only 1.2% in 2009 and then rose by 1% at the end of the period.(164 words)I'd be very delighted to be corrected. Thank you.

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The bar chart ~~illustrates 3 different nations’ percentage of growth in yearly GDP over a four–year period beginning in 2007.~~ shows the annual GDP growth in Tunisia, Japan and Ecuador for the years 2007 - 2010.

Comment: "GDP growth rate" is a specific measure of the health of a country's economy. Do not paraphrase these terms, as they are names of specific statistical measures.

Overall, ~~it can be seen that~~ (Those are completely unnecessary words. Just describe the data itself.) the annual GDP rate in Tunisia decreased, whereas Japan’s increased, and Ecuador's varied over the period. ~~witnessed a reversed pattern over the years~~. ~~Also, Ecuador had its figure fluctuating throughout the course.~~ (There is no "fluctuation" pattern on this chart. Fluctuation can be seen on some line graphs, but I have not seen it in any IELTS task 1 graph. See what "fluctuation" looks like below.)

In the year 2007, Tunisia’s DGP growth was the most significant, by over 6%, nearly doubling (wrong form) that of Ecuador and tripling (wrong form) Japan’s. In the next year, the upturn in Tunisia’s yearly GDP declined by 2.0%, being slightly higher than Japan’s at that time. Ecuador’s GDP rise uplifted (wrong phrasing) to 5%, the highest ~~figure~~ value of all in that due course.

Comment: Avoid the word "figure" in Task 1. In scientific journals (the context of task 1), a figure is a diagram, illustration, or graphic inserted into the text. "Figure" means "data value" only in certain contexts, namely computed quantities in financial and business. For example: "The sales figures for last quarter were 10% higher than expected."

Over the 2 following years, the value of GDP growth in Tunisia kept dropping until eventually stopping at 3%. Meanwhile, Japan’s statistics (wrong word) escalated to 6.5%, surpassing Tunisia’s initial value in 2007. The growth in GDP of Ecuador plummeted to only 1.2% in 2009 and then rose by 1% at the end of the period.

Comment: avoid anthropomorphic verbs "experience, witness" in Task 1. Also avoid descriptive terms such as "escalate" and "Plummet". Instead give mathematical values which you compute on your calculator.

Fluctuation: These graphs illustrate cyclical fluctuation and random fluctuation. Sometimes the fluctuation is natural; sometimes it is caused by sensitivity of the measuring device.

Real fluctuation due to seasonal effects:

Random fluctuation due to the nature of a marketplace:

This fluctuation may be caused by the instrumentation, and also some seasonal effects:

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