IELTS General Writing Task 2 -Please take a look and comment

Write about the following topic:

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.
Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Old homes and proper care of the old people has been an intriguing issue for years. In my opinion it is a family responsibility, in the very first place to take care of their elders when they get old. After that government and society should take steps that old people and old homes get all the proper care to live healthy life.
The old people have spent all of their lives for their families. They raised, support and made them able to live in the society. They gave them values, courage and motivation to face all hardships. So, when they get old and need moral and physical support, it is the family responsibility to stand beside them. Give them respect, love and care as they gave you when you are dependent on them.
In addition to that, there are circumstances when the family is not able to take proper care of their elders. Such as, financial problems or the old one has no one left in the family. In such cases, I would suggest it is the government responsibility to pay for their expenses. After all, these individuals have paid taxes and support the government to run the state.
In all cases, old people cannot be left alone. These people deserve equal rights and care either from their families or the government. And to make it applicable, the government should keep checks on old homes, if the old people are getting proper care or not. And what lifestyle is given to them in the old home.

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