IELTS Academic Writing task 2

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Please help me to check my grammatical or lexical mistakes and mark my essay in IELTS Academic Writing Task 2!

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Topic:

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

Answer:

It is sometimes argued that annual easing up some languages will facilitate people's easier lives. While I disagree with the idea of eliminating unpopular linguistic saying, I do believe that fewer languages could improve the global economy.

On the one hand, language is the method of human communication, used by a particular country or community and interpreting for the internal characteristics. Therefore, individual languages acquire a reputation for national linguistic culture. Through analyzing the unique semantic factors, we could find out something valuable about ancient history, tradition, character, and so on. Besides, using the same language shows our respect for our original ancestral and cement nationally empathetic citizenship. For example, Japanese companies always give priority to those who could use Japanese coherently instead of those with impressive other languages.

On the other hand, such economic globalization varying all over the world leads to widespread popular language like English, Chinese, French... in several countries. This will motivate external trades among countries, putting the global relationship under cultivation as well as developing countries' importing modern technology from prospering ones. Moreover, we could easily widen our connections with foreign friends around the globe through social means and popular languages. Communicating in the same language makes way for each member of international organizations, known as WHO, WTO, UN and the like, to share their own opinions and work in collaboration.

In conclusion, consensus languages are key to accomplish advanced knowledge to upgrade the living conditions. However, people should respect and maintain their mother tongue as one of the most distinctive traditions.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Your essay is off-topic. I do not think you understood the topic.

Certain animal species are endangered, that is, it is predicted that one day in the future, no more of that kind of animal will be alive. This topic is about human languages that are endangered. Of the 7000 languages spoken in the world, about 40% are endangered. Languages die when the last person alive that can spe

You use invented phrases that either do not make sense or are very unnatural English.

You have a large vocabulary, but for these essay, communicating clearly is very important.

It is sometimes argued that annual easing up some languages (That makes no sense. ) will facilitate people's ~~easier~~ lives. While I disagree with the idea of eliminating unpopular linguistic saying, ( This is gibberish. It is meaningless. ) I do believe that fewer languages could improve the global economy.

On the one hand, language is the method of human communication, used by a particular country or community and interpreting for the internal characteristics. (I do not know what that is.) Therefore, individual languages acquire a reputation for national linguistic culture. (These languages are not national languages. They are languages spoken by very small groups of indigenous peoples.) Through analyzing the unique semantic factors, (unnatural) we could find out something valuable about their ancient history, tradition, and character, ~~and so on~~. Besides, using the same language shows our respect for our original ancestral (Ancestral is an adjective. You have used it like a noun, which is ungrammatical.) and cement (wrong form, wrong word) nationally empathetic citizenship. (I don't know what you mean.) For example, Japanese companies always give priority to those who could use Japanese coherently instead of those with ~~impressive~~ other languages. (The topic is not about languages with many native speakers, like Japanese. An example is Ainu, a language spoken on the island of Hokkaido. There are two people remaining - probably very old - who can speak this language.)

On the other hand, ~~such economic~~ globalization ~~varying all over the world~~ leads to widespread use of popular languages like English, Chinese, French... (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or phrases like "and so on" in academic essays.) in several countries. (This is off-topic.) This will motivate external trades (unnatural) among countries, putting the global relationship under cultivation (wrong usage - Only crops and plants are "under cultivation.") as well as developing countries' importing modern technology from prospering ones. (Off-topic) Moreover, we could easily widen our connections with foreign friends around the globe through social means and popular languages. Communicating in the same language makes way for each member of international organizations, known as WHO, WTO, UN and the like, to share their own opinions and work in collaboration. (Off-topic. It is not about the national or international languages.)

In conclusion, consensus languages (unnatural) are key to accomplish advanced knowledge (wrong usage - We do not accomplish knowledge.) to upgrade the living conditions. However, people should respect and maintain their mother tongue as one of the most distinctive traditions.

Here are a very few examples of the 3,000 endangered languages.

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