IELTS

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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It’s true that people now are paying attention more to how to dress up at companies. Others consider that appearance is not as vital as the quality of work. I completely agree that people should focus more on the outcome of work rather than their appearance.

On the one hand, there are numerous plus points to wear elegantly in organizations. Firstly, it will comfort the employees and foster them to work. Their clothes will reflect their imaginaries and also their characteristic. Furthermore, it is convenient for workers to dress smartly that enables them to carry out the work more efficiently. For instance, an employee work in a factory need to move a lot and they just need to dress uniform of company to work. Another reason is the employee’s style will present for the image of the company. For example, multi-national organizations like Apple, Microsoft are well-known over the world. Their staff have always dressed to impress social media or events. It outstands the value and stature of the big company.

On the other hand, I consider that workers should pay attention to their work. Firstly, they should concentrate more on the development and how to make profit for the company. Since the company hires employees to work for them, which means employer put the trust on employees. If workers don’t reach the agreement on the working-contract or regularly meet the deadlines lately, they could be fired. Another reason is dressing occasionally can distract other people. It will compromise others in workplace and lead them to work ineffectively.

In conclusion, it seems to me that a worker both needs to wear smartly and work effectively in workplace, but I think the performance on working is more important than anything else.

Bui Huy Phan

11, 23^rd,2018