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Usually, students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won't be beneficial. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days, many people believe that children should be learnt many kinds of subjects, while others think that students should only study what they are interested in. Although there are two reasons why students should be free to learn what they want, reducing stress and providing a fair education system, I believe that learning many different subjects is more significant.

On the one hand, there are two reasons why people believe that decreasing the number of subjects is beneficial for students. First, when the government change the range of subjects, they may help kids to reduce stress and have more time for relaxing or family. For example, many students in Vietnam must overnight to do their homework because they have to study thirteen subjects during a term. Thus, they do not have enough time to spend with family or take care of themselves. Second, a fair education system may be provided for students. That is because many children are right-brain people who are not interested in math or physics, and the opposite was true for left-brain students. Therefore, they may have a place to study and develop their abilities, such as drawing or singing.

On the other hand, there are several reasons why kids should learn many types of subjects at school. First of all, studying many different subjects may be helpful for children in their life. For instance, kids may learn about what should they do if they are bitten by snakes. Second, most jobs have to link many different fields which children study at school. Thus, they can not follow their dream jobs if they lack knowledge. For example, a doctor has to learn about physics and math.

In conclusion, reducing the range of subjects is believed that it is good for children by many people around the world. In my view, I stand for the opposite, because of being necessary and helpful.