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Armydan Posted 18 years ago

Iambic Pentamter: Please HElp me

I have some serious trouble with Iambic Pentamter,
my rhymes are so so but please help me with iambic pentameter
im trying to do a Shakespearean Sonnet

thanks in advance!

sonnet,

Villainous Devils


Glaive of thy hideous wounded silence and all in painful death
Did you fall into that blissful shade of raven night?
Lonely wretched path, senseless, woe the sigh and thy breath
A sonnet for the sad demons existing in spite of light


Haunted you in those proud yet drunken, loveless, lonely nights
And for the seemingly sweet laughing shadows that stained inyour soul
The threatening memories echoing your honored, wondering,lost white knight
Only a sonnet for your forgiveness; I take no passionatesword, no fickle control


With peril-the sadness I unwillingly, suddenly knifed yoursweet life
The always-fragile road that lies ahead seemingly neveroverflowed
With fear and sensational hope, loss and salvation's bony strife
Did you wake with a sigh of terror in your silk and rosecovered abode?


Did you hear the raven’s woe, ever watchful in this exalted darkness?
Til’ I forgive: in these eternal dreams, I indeed embracethe cloaked, dim blindness
  

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armydan I have some serious trouble with Iambic Pentamter, my rhymes are so so but please help me with iambic pentameter im trying to do a Shakespearean Sonnet thanks in advance! sonnet, Villainous Devils Glaive of thy hideous wounded silence and all in painful death Did you fall into that blissful shade of raven night? Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter Lonely wretched path, senseless, woe the sigh and thy breath A sonnet for the sad demons existing in spite of light Haunted you in those proud yet drunken, loveless, lonely nights Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter And for the seemingly sweet laughing shadows that stained inyour soul The threatening memories echoing your honored, wondering,lost white knight Only a sonnet for your forgiveness; I take no passionatesword, no fickle control With peril-the sadness I unwillingly, suddenly knifed yoursweet life The always-fragile road that lies ahead seemingly neveroverflowed Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter With fear and sensational hope, loss and salvation's bony strife Did you wake with a sigh of terror in your silk and rose covered abode?

— Avangi

  • armydan I have some serious trouble with Iambic Pentamter, my rhymes are so so but please help me with iambic pentameter im trying to do a Shakespearean Sonnet thanks in advance!
  • sonnet, Villainous Devils Glaive of thy hideous wounded silence and all in painful death Did you fall into that blissful shade of raven night?
  • Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter Lonely wretched path, senseless, woe the sigh and thy breath A sonnet for the sad demons existing in spite of light Haunted you in those proud yet drunken, loveless, lonely nights Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter And for the seemingly sweet laughing shadows that stained inyour soul The threatening memories echoing your honored, wondering,lost white knight Only a sonnet for your forgiveness; I take no passionatesword, no fickle control With peril-the sadness I unwillingly, suddenly knifed yoursweet life The always-fragile road that lies ahead seemingly neveroverflowed Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter With fear and sensational hope, loss and salvation's bony strife Did you wake with a sigh of terror in your silk and rose covered abode?
  • Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter Did you hear the raven’s woe, ever watchful in this exalted darkness?
  • Til’ I forgive: in these eternal dreams , I indeed embracethe cloaked, dim blindness Underlined is a line of iambic pentameter As you can see, your lines are way too long.
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armydanI have some serious trouble with Iambic Pentamter,
my rhymes are so so but please help me with iambic pentameter
im trying to do a Shakespearean Sonnet

thanks in advance!

sonnet,
Villainous Devils

Glaive of thy hideous wounded silence and all in painful death
Did you fall into that blissful shade of raven night?
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thanks, that helps alot

any advice on making the rest of my sonnet more imabic?
i really have a hard time shortening the sentences especially when i cant seem to get it into iambic to begin with
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Get the song into your head - so well you can sing it in your sleep. Ta - Da, Ta - Da, Ta - Da, Ta - Da, Ta - Da.

Then, when you're trying to fit words together, you know immediately if they fit, and you don't have to break your train of thought: "Let's see, short - long, short - long etc. - - Does this word fit??" If it doesn't fit, and i
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If you're having trouble dealing with both jobs at once, try writing a few lines without the iambic, trying only to make sense, and to limit yourself to ten syllables.
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Try to find examples of iambic pentameter in ordinary prose. I found these in my two previous posts:

As you can see, your lines are way too long.

You know immediately if they fit.

And you don't have to break your train of thought.

I underlined out loud until you can
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