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Nicolequynh Posted 13 years ago
iambic pentameter help please
how can i make this into an iambic pentameter sonnet? the number of syllables are right i believe but i cant seem to get the stressed and unstressed right. thank you!
Snow falling, oh what a morning it is
coffee is brewing, pancakes are flipping
parents smiling, Kids yelling what is his,
grandparents reading newspaper clippings.
Uniforms rushing, to get back home soon,
the family awaits, dinner is warmed
and thanked, not taken as a silver spoon
kids running about, cuddled for the storm
But not all of the dinners are served warm,
Some are reheated from yesterday’s lunch.
Not all are cuddled up, work is the norm.
But ah, is it hard work to work late, hunched.
But a man has to work hard to provide
to a future family with the bride.
Nicole
Snow falling, oh what a morning it is
coffee is brewing, pancakes are flipping
parents smiling, Kids yelling what is his,
grandparents reading newspaper clippings.
Uniforms rushing, to get back home soon,
the family awaits, dinner is warmed
and thanked, not taken as a silver spoon
kids running about, cuddled for the storm
But not all of the dinners are served warm,
Some are reheated from yesterday’s lunch.
Not all are cuddled up, work is the norm.
But ah, is it hard work to work late, hunched.
But a man has to work hard to provide
to a future family with the bride.
Nicole
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Hello, Nicole. You cannot rely only on number of syllables; your phrasing must consider which would or could reasonably be naturally STRESSED and unstressed syllables: FALLing / SNOW and / CRISP air, / WHAT a / MORNing!
- Hello, Nicole.
- You cannot rely only on number of syllables; your phrasing must consider which would or could reasonably be naturally STRESSED and unstressed syllables: FALLing / SNOW and / CRISP air, / WHAT a / MORNing!
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Hello, Nicole.
You cannot rely only on number of syllables; your phrasing must consider which would or could reasonably be naturally STRESSED and unstressed syllables:
FALLing / SNOW and / CRISP air, / WHAT a / MORNing!
You cannot rely only on number of syllables; your phrasing must consider which would or could reasonably be naturally STRESSED and unstressed syllables:
FALLing / SNOW and / CRISP air, / WHAT a / MORNing!
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Thank you! I have tried revising it now and this is what i have. The lines with an * are the ones I am not too sure about.
FALLing/ SNOW/ and/ CRISP/ air,/ WHAT/ a/ MORNing! * [this is the line you made but my teacher wants it to be unstressed then stressed]
CofFEE/ is/ BREWing,/ panCAKES/ are/ FLIPping
PaRENTS/ are/ SMILing,/ kids/ YELLing/ ADORning,
GrandPARents/ REA
FALLing/ SNOW/ and/ CRISP/ air,/ WHAT/ a/ MORNing! * [this is the line you made but my teacher wants it to be unstressed then stressed]
CofFEE/ is/ BREWing,/ panCAKES/ are/ FLIPping
PaRENTS/ are/ SMILing,/ kids/ YELLing/ ADORning,
GrandPARents/ REA
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The meter is not correct. Changing of the word order, and adding or omitting some words, is needed in order to get the iambic pentameter meter ( _ ^ _^ _^ _^ _^ ) right, for example, the following:
It's ^falling, ^yes, the ^snow, oh ^such a ^morn.
It's ^brewing, ^yes, the ^coffee, ^oh such ^smell.
The ^father's ^smiling, ^he who ^press the ^horn;
it's ^late, and ^soon will ^r
It's ^falling, ^yes, the ^snow, oh ^such a ^morn.
It's ^brewing, ^yes, the ^coffee, ^oh such ^smell.
The ^father's ^smiling, ^he who ^press the ^horn;
it's ^late, and ^soon will ^r
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